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Her Hearts Opportunity

Regretful good-byes kept her mind wandering
through her past with unanswered questions of

‘What if?’,

Echoing in her thoughts as she often imagined
eventual bliss,

Yearning for more then just a physical
attraction…from him,

What if?

Had her heart given up too soon?

Though he never reached for her hand
as it slipped away,

Never called her name as she slowly began
to leave….she walked backwards,

How long do you remain in an unbalanced love?

What happens when Opportunity’s knock
goes unanswered?

Maybe Opportunity knocked on the wrong door,

Soon answered by an unfamiliar face……

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  • Gods child40 silver member
    September 19

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    What happens when Opportunity’s knock
    goes unanswered?

    Maybe Opportunity knocked on the wrong door,

    Soon answered by an unfamiliar face…… (Very deep and heartfelt!!)


  • afroqban
    September 15

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    Maybe Opportunity knocked on the wrong door,

    Soon answered by an unfamiliar face……


    I totally understand that! You moved me with this one, loved every word of it, though I felt like i was prying in your life lol. Great job


    • MahoganyFlow
      September 16
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      Thanks for taking the time to read! And you weren't prying! lol This wasn't about me!