innocent phrases soaked me in quickly- left me speechless.
perfect way of persuading me closer- I couldn't resist.
magnets bared against my limbs with each rejection- you wouldn't listen.
stearing my life in a different pattern, of solitude- for you got what you wanted.
Glad I'm the one for acheiving your goal.
[you came, you saw, you conquered]
Author notes
exactly 6 lines
Enjoy =D
A contest entry
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This just overflows with emotion. I really, really hope that you have lots of support from family and friends. Thank you so much for sharing something so painful.
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Dude, very nice i really like what you have done with this. Short to the point, yet so descriptive. Awesome
"[you came, you saw, you conquered]"
A really great finishing line, i look forward to reading more
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thank you.
glad you liked it, and how it might motivate you to read more =)
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Powerful write, thank you for entering my contest. This write was filled with emotion and very descriptive for such a short poem. I enjoyed reading it, good penning!
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This is also a wonderful piece you have here. I have been raped before.. and have a few pieces regarding it.. it leaves you.. damaged forever. This was just fantastic. Nicely placed and the wordplay was great. Thanks for commenting on mine, and thanks for sharing yours. :]
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huh, wow so much depth so much meaning.
this has feeling it is raw and real.
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thank you.
glad you enjoyed. =)
~after the mass confusion. ^_^
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