a simple embrace to carry us through the day
two lovers awaiting the night
when our world would be complete
and all the wrongs made right
our love has seen us through
the many disappointments and tears
while smiles and laughter filled our lives
we overcame life’s burdens and fears
all the time we danced the dance of love
our sorrows and smiles unyielding
dancing, turning, escaping, returning
one day upon the other, building
our love has seen us through
the good times and the bad
as in unison we swayed with the music
always cherishing the time we had
it’s raining now, but the sun still shines
we’ve stories yet untold
we still dance the dance of love
as layer upon layer our lives unfold
and if someday our sunshine fades
‘neath the blanket of love we’ll remain
forever lovers we’ll live our lives
and tango in the rain
dee garner
© september 14, 2009
In a list
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- WOMEN Support Group group list • next in list
A contest entry
- HUGUENAUTIES CONTEST No. #48 by huguenauties.
750 points, ended September 25, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I've just joined this group and decided to read the poems suggested by the date. I had no idea such a treat was in store. A lovely, lovely poem to begin here..thank you so much.
Ani Grace
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Thank you for reading and commenting in this, Ani Grace. And a big welcome to our Women's Support Group
Dee
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I am sure while you dance in the rain your rainbow will be above your head
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life just happens
your poem reminds me of this
to go with it walk through the storms
and love forever grows
beautiful write
God bless you my friend...
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Excellent work her honey
You just have to get a book for you and your family please your family wil truly cherrish it forever
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It was a treat to read this again, Dee. Congratulations on the HM.
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Absolutely fantastic! This could melt any heart. It is so full of love that it emanates from the page and embraces the reader. I feel as though I was privy to an exchange that I am just not sacred enough to witness. I have to bookmark this, love it...LOVE IT!
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CONGRATULATIONS Dee on taking out an HM trophy.
angelica
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What a wonderful dance!
Beautiful verses Dee
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I already read this but I am commenting so that it shows that in the Moxie group's reading list.
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A lovely poem! A tango itself has such complexities and layers of feeling and meaning that it's such a perfect dance to choose: that last line is so beautiful and fitting to end on! So romantic!
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Dear Dee, I've only just been able to get to a PC, sorry I'm late in commenting.
A wonderful poem on true love, it is wonderful when the love is there to be cherished forever. Your poem is very beautiful, I loved reading it very much and I love the tango, Heath and I sometimes dance in our living room to the tango. Good luck in the voting.
Hine.
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This is a song, Dee, lovely images, meter and rhyme; more, you have a portrait of life-long love which is extremely endearing. Storms come and go, how wonderful to have a partner to dance with through them all. Cheers, M
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beautifully expressed
The rhyme and alliteration are harmonious. The meter is as paced and as balanced as the tango that you speak of. I really appreciate the homage to the experience that life has be-gifted you. Your words are thoughtful and sincere...not to mention that I'm a sucker for the rain. It's good to read more of your work.
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Very enjoyable read!
Sentimental and romantic..two lovers dancing in the rain..finding happiness together despite sorrow and pain. A great love story you have told as layer upon layer, your two lives unfold.
Best of Luck in this contest!
♥ Maureen
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excellent~
Well
I have to say I do know how to do The Tang
A beautiful poem...told in such a lovely tender way
I really enjoyed the read sis............
Best of luck in the contest
I got mine in for this one too........drop by when ya can
I am still not getting notices when this group's new contest goes up
Why I have no idea........but I always manage to find it LOL
Again this is beautiful
Best of luck in the contest...
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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just a lovely write,
i so enjoyed this piece
and the way you tied it
tight, with lovers knot
Que Bella
with love and blessings
Rend
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Dear Dee, the Tango is one dance I never mastered.
Beautiful story of everlasting love, you tell it so eloquently, the last verse I especially love as it's so true. Good luck in the voting Dee.
Love Joan
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So well done!
And with such a large family! Phew! Lucky are the people described here, and seemingly fewer and fewer.
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Romance in a dance,
you tell the story lovingly,
sweeping the years along
in the unfolding of your
layers of love.
A beautiful piece, dee.
M-C
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Dear Dee,
My tango wouldn't earn a second glance,
in fact, somehow, I never got a chance,
for the girls would all retreat
to protect their dainty feet
from my clumsy steps which always killed romance.
I tried it once when I was young and bold.
My partner quit and left me in the cold.
She said: "One tuirn with you
and my toes are black and blue
and you bruise my boobs with such a rigid hold."
So I never got to tango in the rain
and I doubt I'll ever get the chance again
and even when it's dry
all the girls would pass me by
'coz I guess they thought it wasn't worth the pain.
Perhaps I'd do better if I tried it with you?
Your poem makes in sound really nice.Thankyou for entering and best of luck in the voting. (I'm glad I don't get to vote because I'd want everyone to win.)
Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh (R.)
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Beautiful story of love
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Precious~
Oh My this is a Beauty
Just Love the weaving of words Dee and the Images
You Bless us to see
Lovely Lovely~~~
Tight rhyme~ brings a smile.. Oh Yes it does
Keep that quill dancing
Thank You for sharing Your Voice
Best wishes in the contest
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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A lovely piece very well written. My best wishes.
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I don't even know where to begin Dee. There are so many things that stand out for me in this piece.
Your use of the tango alone brings so much more imagery to the read. I can vividly see the dancers, the lovers, choreographing their steps in life following the twists, turns and dips with grace, precision and passion. Love is the music they dance to and when it rains or storms, one needs only to turn up the volume to keep the rhythm and not miss a step.
This is a wonderfully written piece Dee and great take on the prompt. I thoroughly enjoyed the read. Thanks so much for entering the contest and best of luck in the voting.
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It's lovely and speaks of love that endures. Knowing that a relationship ought not to be a sprint, but a marathon. It is written eloquently, expressing what seems to be rare, an enduring love. I used to be pretty good at guessing who would win the Hugie contests so I'm on record that this will be in the top two.
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I enjoyed the dance of love here, the dance of words being presented by you, as well! It was indeed a sweet poem, respected auntie.
With best wishes for the contest to you
~Massy~
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a wondrous poem that sparkles like stars, ah the dance of love, how smooth it is, even in the sadder times the rhythm flies across the face of life, and in the joyous times, it glides like music playing within the spirit's bright light.
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Ahh, Ian, you always make me feel that my poetic efforts carry rewards. Thank you for this lovely comment
Dee
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