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Sway

My Mother Knew
How to Keep
Death & Sorrow
Away.
She danced,
She laughed,
She sang,
She played
And She Swayed.

Oh yes, indeed
I did Learn
Lots from Her…..

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  • Swan song gold member
    October 30

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    simply and yet very effetive by the way she danced swayed and etc expand on some of these you have some strong concrete beginings here


  • glenn shannon silver member
    October 24

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    a beautiful short but intense trib to your mum loved it keep that quill penning xo


  • John Faulkner
    October 11

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    A loving tribute to your mother..heartfelt..moving..wonderful.Fabulous write

    John


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    October 9

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    Wonderfully penned. It is vibrant and full of life and I feel as I read the last lines you are smiling and winking at me. This is a great piece of advise and a great pick me up


  • Quill
    September 27

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    A whole world of hugs to you, seriously beautiful poetry, damn the Atlantic ocean


  • Mr.
    September 22
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    nice poem. i learned a lot from mine too.


  • individuality gold member
    September 20
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    yeah, youwant my attention


  • InvisibleMan silver member
    September 15

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    Huh....positive on at least two level. I've been thinking of my experiences of late as being along the same lines.....at least my interpretation on what you read.....we all have our our personal..."font"?

    I went out dancing last weekend and loved it. Swaying on the dance floor, I spoke of going out and singing karaoke...something I used to do quite often. I don't think I laughed but but I was the cause of some and got a very endearing comment on my having been missed.

    All in all, I think your poem aptly expressed one I had already started and, from a different perspective, said what I was going to say. Thanks....I was too busy to write it anyway. :-)

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