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From the Mouth of Confusion

I write what I know will never be found,
concealed within the words of the forgotten.
A story that has been spoken to the deaf, unheard,
told by the mute and by the blind seen clearly.
This, now, is what I will glady tell to you in truth,
that sight, sound, and speech will never be understood.

Whether what it is I tell can be, by you, understood
then that is not what I can answer, only in you it is found.
Can it be where you take it, not as falshood but, as truth,
and remembered by the ages to come and never be forgotten?
Think of what I say, meditate within your mind ever clearly.
I plead to you with all my soul to not leave my words unheard.

If, though, that all my effort to tell these things go unheard,
at least take and keep the treasure that is for you to be understood.
Perhaps what you hear from my mouth is not taken clearly,
then may you be humble and a curious mind with query in you be found.
Then, my friend, all that I tell stay with you forever and never be forgotten,
because to you it is real and known to your core as truth.

If you could see by now everything I will say to you is in truth,
for you I have felt your cries and not in my ears they went unheard.
Your problems or agitations to me has been seen and not forgotten.
Each of the things that you are coping with to me has been understood.
Having the conception of what it is you need to have within found
because I lived these things that is why I tell to you this clearly.

Now without holding out what I wish to tell to you from hidden words so clearly,
is to be told by me as i've said before deep in my soul so to tell you the truth.
Search for what will reside in your heart to keep yourself alive and it will be found,
but do not let what may come to you in reality to get away from you unheard.
For with asking comes knowledge and truly what you find it will be understood,
and for sure there will never be a time when what you learn will be forgotten.

Do not you fret when a time may come when all things you knew is forgotten,
because you may come across a memory that will bring that back so clearly,
and once again within your mind all things that i've told to you again be understood. You will know for sure without a doubt that what you know is soley the truth,
and what you say with full conviction will by others never be unheard.
May contentment and purpose with certainty in your own words be found.

To now make sure what I say is not forgotten and always be understood,
what you search for and what is found will be seen through new eyes clearly,
because all the things that is in truth should never be kept from ears unheard.



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  • SteveS gold member
    September 17

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    Brave end words! I applaud that. Not only are they brave, but used in a very intelligent manner to cause a logic to the message herein, which I think is very intuitive to foresee from beginning to ending of each sestet. I noticed how your lines become much longer toward the end of the poem compared to the start, taking on more of a letter written to this subject, which I feel is a slight strain to the poetic character of this write. I love the third sestet, as I feel this shines in word usage and, to me, marks the "heart" of this write. Couple of misspelled words "queary" , "speach", "crys", "souly" I love to see the commas in a line like this "Then my friend all that I tell stay with you forever and never be forgotten," ...after "then" and "friend" as they cue the pause, that would add to the dramatic effect here. This line "Contentment and purpose will be with certainty be in your own words found" maybe one too many "be"s. Intelligent, interesting, a tiny bit bumpy, but great.