~by Gregg Rowe~
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I live
I live too
I live to be
I live to be here
I live to be here too
I live to be here to live
I live to be here to live too
I live to be here to live to be
Author notes
This is a upside down nonet where the syllables are:
1,
1-2,
1-2-3,
1-2-3-4,
1-2-3-4-5,
1-2-3-4-5-6,
1-2-3-4-5-6-7,
1-2-3-4-5-6-7-8,
1-2-3-4-5-6-7-8-9.
It is a Zen poem, which is more interested in searching your soul and psyche for answers to your muse than a poem full of imagery and concreteness.
Because I am dealing with a lot of health issues, I am searching my muse and my spirituality to gain strength for an operation that is not only dangerous because of my HIV status, but if it is successful, I will gain another fifteen years of my life to continue to write and enjoy life.
Written April 5th, 2004
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A contest entry
- Optional Double-Cross (Contest) by facesofnatalia.
300 points, ended August 28, 2004, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Power of Affirmations - Self Suggestions by drifting cloud.
1200 points, ended October 25, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Very skillful write. "I live to be" or perhaps 'I be to live'. Refreshing write. I might try this format sometime. Thank you for entering 'The Power of Affirmations' contest.
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Windsong: I think it just continues to show my ambivalence in living. Though Stonehedge is a mystic site to go and ponder with one muses, I thought the dophins would represent communication and intelligence betweeen water souls (I'm a Pisces) but I guess that doesn't work! Gregg
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This seem to be a sort of mantra in a way. It also seems not to be as hopeful as one would first suspect. The form is very interesting. I do have to say though that the background and picture are mismatched. While both promote hope on their own together they mock it.
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Very interesting indeed. Unique and original and obviously a beautiful format. At first I thought it was a bout of schizophrenia with the whole 'me too' thing. (Hanging around with Gollum/Smeagol lately,
). Well done and God bless.
Cheers!
Hastings
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wow this was pretty cool... ive never read anything like this before. i hope your operation goes well. i think you have some more to say!
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liked the pictures--which includes your poem, it looks like a christmas tree of sorts...everyday is christmas if you carry the right attitude (according to my gramma)..make each day matter, she said... doctors are after me too...what the heck, im busy..only go every time i collapse... good luck on your surgery...
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Never seen anything like this... NEVER! Well, Can't say I exactly understand, But nice write.
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wow. I really liked that. If nothing else, the picture at the beginning was stunning. But really, you packed a lot of emotion and beauty into those few sylables. Great job, and good luck with your struggles. May you find peace.
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IT MAKES A PYRAMID! thats exciting! I like shapes they make me smile!
Great poem!
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WTF?
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This is a really great idea for a poem. I've seen things similar to it, but none quite like this. Very nicely done. I hope things with your health get better, soon. <3
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this is good. I read a book once that did something sort of like this but it was upside down. I might have to try one of these. Great write
bes of luck
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I've never really seen anything like this, shows how much I know. I think this is really cool, it reminds me of the things people write in yearbooks. Except thats just to take up space in yearbooks. I love the background. I'm interested in Zen things and Buddha and I think you just inspired me to learn more about it. I wish you the best luck with gaining strength. I know I didn't give you any helpful advice, but that's because your already awesome at everything you write. Have a wonderful day, and thanks for sharing your work. ~Shannon
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great poem. Hope all goes well we want you back here writing for years to come.
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I really love this Zen work!
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amazing! so simple, but so powerful. i wish you all the best! excellent job with writing it. was so worth the read.
Blu -
The right diagonal is my absolute favorite! Bravo.... so simple, yet so complex.
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love these poems - incapable of writing them myself (as sad as they made be). Lately, this style of poetry that you're using is starting to seem more and more desirable. The simplicity, and yet the power of the poem itself can really be felt.
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Quite an interesting title for an even more interesting poem, it's well written and form fitting i'm sure and it's message is quite clear (although i don't recommend that anyone try to read it fast). It's a good poem to take in slow and reflect to, it's message had several different meanings to me each time i read it. great write!
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What a wondrous poem and form. You have inspired me to try my hand at this style, it seems to be written with so much ease, and so much is said with so few words. Volumes spoken here my friend. Great job! Good luck with the contest.
Much Love,
Renee
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I really feel the simplicity and thought behind this. It is something I well appreciate and find hard to accomplish. One of my good friends is HIV-pos., we've been through a lot of soul searching together, but they are still amazing, uplifting, never ceasing to amaze me with their genuine happiness. Remember to ALWAYS trust your intuition. It is the greatest thing you have. It is your muse, your being, the moment, the zone, the truth of who you are. Good luck to you, Raquel
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wooshness... this was much of a tongue twister by the very end.... I very much enjoyed it...alot of living going on....oh, how I wish I were a salted raisin... not that you wanted to know that... me is sowwy, I'm a bit, what's the word..... random. Anyways, this is very nice to read, and very complex, despite the simple words... I want to try writing one sometime..... interesting...
may petunias growing on your pet frog's back, sprout watermelon -
This is an excellent write...i love the formation of it...I am not too familiar with form poetry but i really like the way it is done.
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Did you notice if you read it down diagonally, it reads the same thing! That was so difficult to pen for me, I spent two days working and reworking and then someone phoned me and I was playing around with it and said something and then it just dawned on me what I wanted to write and this is the result. Such a simplistic poem but very Zen. Thank you for bookmarking it, it is one of my favorites that I have penned recently.
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This poem is so simple on the surface, yet it invites a deeper introspection of ones self. Very well done! I'm bookmarking this one.
Hugs,
Willow -
lordoftherings,
this is great...i always enjoy comming across a style...i belive that it is very inspirational...great write...thanks for entering my contest and good luck..
<3,
Exit
OlAf&ExIt -
I absolutely love this! Thanks for showing me Gregg. I am going to go and try to write one myself... lets just hope that it turns out the right way. I will send you a link, or copy for your wonderful critiqing. thank you!
Kayla Dawn -
The simplicity of the form and message is strikingly deep.
I liked this very much.
Thanks, Maria -
I like this... It works well. The form I use is a nonet and the lines do not need to stand alone, but can wrap around. it is usually done the other way 9-8-7-6-5-4-3-2-1, but I am sure an inverted/reversed nonet would work. The great thing about forms in poetry is they are bendable, as long as you acknowledge you are bending... i do like the message here. The way it builds... Nicely done, Susan
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I know nothing about poetry or noines (I didn't even know there was such a thing as a noine until just moents ago). But I liked your noine. Has a serious message, but it also made me laught a little- witht the building up of the repetitive line. Job well done (in my unoficial and un-poetically-educated) book.
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