Look there is the road to el dorado
And he wont sit next to me,
I take another sip from the bottle
That’s putting us to sleep
Its just another point on the map
Towards our destination
Without standing next to me, trapped
The music keeps going
This city is filled up with smoke
I just want to add some more
Life is a plan a show a trap and joke
And its all good clean fun
Until the next stop will you ride alone
Because I am lonesome
And I need that look to tell me
That look to tell me I am someone
And now were back to el dorado
Just another treasure hunt gone wrong
Lets fill the car up with smoke
We wont forget its all good fun..
what did you think?
Comments
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I really like this poem. Great imagery, it painted a wonderful picture in my mind. It reminded me of spontaneous road trips with my friends. Keep up the good work.
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I wish I could judge your entry for the contest, but unfortunately your piece exceeds the 100 word limit stated in the contest rules. In fairness to those who followed the conditions of the contest, I am DQing the poem. I did enjoy reading it, and I thank you for entering. Keep up the great work!
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WOW
wonderfully done I really liked these lines,
Life is a plan a show a trap and joke
And its all good clean fun
I like these very much the I was drawn in by the fist few lines and the end was wonderfully mastered very nicely done keep them coming and good luck in the contest!!
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