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Homeward

Rivers
Cascading down
Templates for the living
Taking paths of least resistance
Homeward

Copyright © Henri Ferguson 2004

Author notes

Have never written like this before, interesting challenge and fun to write.
Written April 5th, 2004

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  • maryannde gold member
    April 16, 2004
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    Living in the desert, I do not have rivers close by. That rarely keeps me from pondering their beauty though.

    This was quite lovely Henri. Ive never tackled a cinquain, but it looks like you have perfected the art.

    Hugs...
    Mary Ann


  • myrataal silver member
    April 13, 2004
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    Upside down meaning out of the ordinary

  • myrataal silver member
    April 13, 2004
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    I returned to read this one, Henri - interesting when reading vertically: Rivers cascading templets taking paths Homeward; rivers down living resistance Homeward. I love to read things upside down at times.

    Hugs.

    Myra


  • Ava Noire silver member
    April 5, 2004
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    Yup - what Myra said

    Very lovely Cinquain. The wording and visuals are both top notch, and the form is (or appears to be) correct. Thanks for a well done, lovely entry

  • myrataal silver member
    April 5, 2004
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    Concise and true

    Perfect!

    Right now we are experiencing heavy rainfalls in our region. For me this poem is VERY visual ...

    I think it may also be read on a spiritual level: that raging, passionate, wondrous stream of determination, taking a shortcut towards Eternity!

    Brilliant.

    Myra

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