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Red's Meaning

She could understand my silent words screaming inside my head
If she cared to decipher my babbling thoughts into English
Do you think there’s enough color to paint all these walls red?
Red everywhere to express the time, care and love in all lines of sight
Bright red would state current and freshness.
Deep shows the length of standing time.
To show the many years I have waited to fess my unconditional heart.
If only...
Right now I don’t dare to breathe
As my hourglass bleeds
Each piece of sand moves in an endless downward flow; without ending
Like an etch-a-sketch a picture closed off makes the difference of what's next
Pre determined almost in a genetically and adaptive way...
Mapped out knowing the form/shape it'll take
If only...
Now I'm only here in body visiting
With my one pair of eyes they’re viewing different images
I hear what she says; I see what she wants
I am confused with her intensions
Her body language isn’t following suite
If only…
She herself wont wander that road
Let herself with blind fingers lend the way
Feel the red painted before her
But she won’t.

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  • the-hurricane-girl
    December 5, 2009
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    Aww

    I really like this, it's original and deep, the ending is really sad.. 'feel the red painted before her' was a powerful line xx