may i raise this single demand;
naked and parched,
lost
in the desert where i've grown?
love me like i want you to
I. i send the herd of wind that flocks in your pasture
between my lips
there is a hummingbird that sings
of only love: one we cannot reach with
sight but
songs
pluck me from the meadow of your dreams; move,
move me
like wind makes love to the curtains
and some time inbetween
translate me into this poem
II. your name best rhymes with moon
in the dark room of all lines i've untyped,
you are the moon with
no name:
a customized moon who neither rises nor sets
but smiles through the window
of my eyes
i will not question the wrinkles in your face
or the blotches of someone else's
kohl
for, once,
you simply rose from a morning dream
and justified
the raison d'être of love
Author notes
http://www.famousartistsgallery.com/gallery/vangogh-sn.html
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http://www.famousartistsgallery.com/gallery/frame/vangogh-sr.html
the starry night really set my muse going.
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A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Contest by Night Hope.
1500 points, ended September 19, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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luv u Namita...
A poem dat touched me..
unique one n r
seldom found..
' I will not question the wrinkles in your face
or the blotches of someone's else
kohl'
i luvd dt.. Nami
a versatile poet, my friend..
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awww thiis is truly b e a u t i f u l....seriously nammy u're totally wow....so in love with this poem!!!
this part is shoooo cute:
a customized moon who neither rises nor sets
but smiles through the window
of my eyes
~keep rockin'!!!! ^ ^
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~perfection has touched my eyes
Love & Blessings
Rend
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i like how you structure your piece. The diction and the way a reader will utter your piece proves how fluid and effective you are as a poet. Vibrant, beautiful and brilliant my friend.
we miss you here and we are hoping you write more often.
hope to see a new piece from you the soonest.
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This is a great piece.
I love your word choice in this, it read so smoothly.
I'm very glad I clicked
Thanks for sharing.
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You are wonderful. It is a great piece and I would like to see more of it.
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A wonderful piece it seem to flowin his nice cool breeze something you can lay back and relax and let you just enjoy . Wondeful job
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I loved this. It was written in unusual form but it still had really good flow. Very lyrical! keep it up please!
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I like how you use metaphor in this poem. As a legally blind man, I also appreciate this line, which really spoke to me while I read, "One we cannot reach by sight but with songs." I enjoyed reading this very much.
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both symbols which have appeard a lot recently in my own writing
i quite liked this, it had a lyrical quality to it, i read it in rhythm
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meandering like a river of dreams
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Awesome poetry.... I'm lost for the words... keep on going...
mina
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you did a really fine job writing this poem
your use of air really was effective...
and I just adored the line:
translate me into a poem
well done!
fine writing!
well done!
ears/Seattle
WAY TO WRITE!
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bravo, well in space and imagry that creates that beautiful sense of longing which perfect the metaphors...bravo!
w silent reverie
-jas
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Very good
A deep and meaningful poem of love with out reservation, unusual form used in this one, very well crafted.
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this is stunning... absolutely brilliant poetry...
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I feel so proud when I hear that from you.
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This is lovely
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thank you Mari..nice to see you
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nammie....this poem is as precious as you are ...sweet one
sigh~~~
yessssssss sigh~~~
hugs for you
mally
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thank you so much
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yay you!
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shuddup LOSER
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*sigh*
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Amazing images and allusions here in this excellent love poem... brilliant, indeed!!
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Thank you!
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brilliant!
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Thank you.
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Oh! What else I can say? Your poetical voice ascends to the moon, my dear friend. Oh! - once again.
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Aww thank you so much Sonja
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Oh my, you've come back with a BANG, Namita! This is absolutely beautiful from start to finish. I simply LOVE this.
Brilliant!!
~ Nicolette
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Thank you Nic! Waiting for something from your pen too!
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Gee I have missed that golden pen of yours hun, this is wonderful C
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Van Gogh has always been one of my own favorite artists, as well. On an old movie recorded after I'd gone to bed was a documentary about the movie starring Kirk Douglas as Van Gogh - so much pertinent information was provided about the man. Very intriguing, as is this poem, Namita. Your writing always surpasses the so-called limitations of your youth, which is incredible, I think. Thank you for entering my contest, Sweetie. Good luck.
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Van Gogh is one of my favourites too Thank you for the kind comments Wanda... and thank you for sparking something...my muse was too tired and dusty... so thank you so much!
And I think I've fixed the link problem. If there's still a problem let me know!
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They both work fine, Namita. Thanks for fixing them. Ahhh, to stroll along that hill in Saint-Remy, ehhh? Beautiful. And, of course, "Starry Nights" is a longtime favorite, too.
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"move me
like wind makes love to the curtains"
i am so proud that you're my daughter...
this is absolutely beautiful! very moving poetry...
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awww thank you i love you too..
i did a lot of i-don't-know-what on this. so i didn't know if it would work out well.
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