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Charade

Lets dig down deep
lets see what we can find beneath
a lost soul or perhaps no soul at all
under the mask you wear
what lies beneath
Is no more then self doubt
Pity and fear
when we get down to it
whats under your gold cover
Really isn't that great
so please can we stop this charade

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I chose option 2
Pic: http://esafian.deviantart.com/art/Masks-1-5437693

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  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 6

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    Superb write! You have really showed that all is not what it seems sometimes and if we dig deep enough we could get an unpleasant surprise! Sadly something that is becoming all to common these days Love the snappy approach to it!
    Hugs


  • PandorasBox
    October 2

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    How beautifully put, sis..."Everything that glitters is not gold"; a very true line from an old, old country song. Its always best to be our real selves instead of hiding behind a false face, even if the reality isn't such a pretty package.
    Hugs,
    ~selena~


  • sgking123 gold member
    September 17

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    excelelnt

    love teh contrast usage..it was so good in these two lines..it made this introduction an enchanting one...would you beleive that I read thru to alst line so hungrily.well done...please visit me and read me.


  • PastelMoons gold member
    September 17

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    A raw portrayal of human deception!
    My fav lines -- 'when we get down to it
    whats under your gold cover Really isn't that great'
    I love how you expose the charade in a no nonsense way!
    Always blessed to read you!

    ~Pastel


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    September 14

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    Awesome, Sis...

    Less is more...
    So much power & profound truth expressed so beautifully in so few words...
    You never fail to astound & impress with the depth & clarity of your words...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • Pheonix
    September 14

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    This is an eye opening piece. Unfortunately none of us are perfect and we tend to hide behind lies. Our heart tells truth of who we are. Thank you so much for sharing this piece. Good Luck!


  • Denerica silver member
    September 14

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    Yes, be real for you can't hide behind the mask, especially if our tongues and actions give us away anyhow. We are not perfect...and hide behind so much, but need a heart check, for it is our heart that is genuine. Brilliant write, profound. Blessings.


  • redmoonnrizing silver member
    September 14

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    Amen to that!!! Its hard to find a soul who is truly genuine. I find this trait more prevalent in young people. I am so glad I had boys Great piece!!!


  • Amera gold member
    September 14

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    You truly are the queen of dark and cynical poetry. This poem is penned so that the reader feels the stabbing emotion on a personal level. Well done!

    Love,
    Amera♥

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