Give my body to the earth,
Bury me deep within the ground
Plant a seed inside my heart
And let life’s wonders grow from the mound.
Starting as a sleeping mortal
Let flesh slowly fade away
From the seed permit a shoot
To slowly reach the day.
Begin the muscle disintegration
Allow the veins to break and fall
Into the soil more roots take place
Determined to beat it all.
Bit by bit the cells collapse
Tissue and organs subside
Up from the shoot a seedling is born
Reaching to the sky.
As time wears on the bones fall down
Nothing left of me at all
But above the ground a powerful tree
Stands proud and strong and tall.
Author notes
just something i've been thinking about lately. the end does not exist one life gives life to another.
Please tell me what you think
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inspiring work.
The metaphor of reincarnation from Human or animal to Floral is great and as you say..one life creates the other/another life" and that is even stronger .
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Beautiful. You did really well with contrasting a decaying body with a maturing tree. I liked this very much; captivating from the first sentence. Well said
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Good; mixed theme
I like the beckoning of life's cycle that you create. However in line 13, i'd find a different word for cells. Your words all have a nature gripped theme except for line 13, which sounds more scientific. I wouldn't touch anything else though. -
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thank you for your comment. that gives me something to think about. i see where you are coming from however if you think "cells" is too scientific what about the line "tissues and organs subside" does that give off too much scientific-ness as well? much appreciated. thank you
~haunted~
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