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The Heart of the Treasure



On a September Saturday
the attic hideaway revealed
a leather strapped trunk.

"Oh," the young boy's voice
called in surprise, "Great-great
Uncle Buck's treasure map," as he
clasped the worn paper to his heart.

Down the steep steps he ran to Mother,
"Just like you told me, the Rocky Mountains,
the Grand Canyon, Carlsbad Caverns, and even
the pirate treasure island in the Carribean."

Mother smiled, "Now don't you go getting ideas,
young man. Mama told me your great-great
Uncle Buck wasted all his young years searching
for hidden treasure shown on this map he had found."

"And he never discovered the treasure?" the young voice queried sadly.

"Only when he returned home, after miles and miles of travel.
Staying true to himself, finding his heart, not listening to those who said
he couldn't, that is when he founded the local museum," said Mother.

Smiling knowingly, the boy said, "And he found Great-great Aunt Emma!"





(The story continues with part two)

Author notes

Never let others control your view of you
and the heights to which you may rise.
Remember, the treasure lies in your heart.


"The Heart of the Treasure" part two
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5723081

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  • drifting cloud silver member
    October 2
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    Excellent message told in a story. I love it! Marvelous!


  • Melodies
    September 21

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    Has the feel of an adventure in the making and I like this very much. Well said, good poet!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 21
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      Thank you, Melodies!

      The story has already advanced
      to part two, with more to come.
      My stories always seem to grow and grow!

      M-C


  • malmadre gold member
    September 19

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    A heartwarming story, our treasure is right in front of us, if we just open our hearts.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 20
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      Very wise reply!

      Too often the search goes far afield!

      Thank you for stopping in, malmadre.

      M-C


  • Periwinkle Blue
    September 16

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    A heartwarming write!


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    September 14

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    excellent~

    Ahhhhhh
    I so did enjoy this read sis........
    This story is indeed a treasure within itself
    Loved the authors note as well
    Best of luck in the contest
    I just posted a new one
    Hope you drop by and give it a read
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 14
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      Oh, thank you, Susan.
      It was fun to imagine!

      A little Ms. Marvel advice
      in the notes!!

      On my way to your page...

      M -C


  • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
    September 14
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    This is very beautiful and heart warming. Ok. I am having withdrawals. I thought this wwas going to be one of your sagas. I am a little dissappointed. Really.lol.....Naaaa! I do miss your mini series. I think this one would make a great one. The adventures of uncle Buck. Later on the kid growing up and perhaps going through some adventures of his own. Maybe the museum has a portal to the past through the objects that are in it. I have a million ideas. Now lets get to it! lol...Missing your stories, can you tell?

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 14
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      I knew it! I knew it!

      My characters always want to live beyond one episode!!

      But I'm still trying to store up enough energy to tie Quest
      and Poetry Aisle together, for there is a major connection!!!

      Portal to the past in the Museum. Love it!

      M-C

      • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
        September 14

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        as far as your characters wanting to live beyond one episode.....Uncle Buck and his great great nephew asked me to have a talk with you because they were getting cramped waiting around in this smaller piece. They want to get out and stretch their legs. I told them I would talk to you.


        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          September 14
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          Ha! Ha! Ha!

          You are so persuasive!

          I think I need an infusion of oxygen to get my energy back!!!!

      • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
        September 14
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        You know....you could tie all three together. I am going to have to reread both those series to see the connection. I know it seemed similar but I wanna grasp it again for my self.

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          September 14
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          It will unfold--the connection---
          as the time travelers move forward--
          to the calender year of the Poetry Aisle,
          which is in limbo just after Valentine's Day, 2009!


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    September 14

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    Hope and mystery
    life and all that is in it
    is quite a puzzle and adventure,
    this is what life is about
    an experience
    we should all stand our ground
    be who we are
    very inspirationalI love the ending as well, brought a smile because it is very profound
    God bless you my friend...


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 14
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      Kathy, so good to see you.
      I have missed your words!

      Thank you for sharing your thoughts
      as they are always inspirational---
      and pack a punch as well!

      M-C


  • UncleDunk gold member
    September 14

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    Ha! Great read. I enjoyed the author's note as much as the poem itself.


  • pixiestix gold member
    September 14
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    A lovely little story with the treasure of your wisdom encoded in the map provided. We each have a treasure map inside us which is indeed our hearts. Sometimes the route we follow may be scenic or plagued with detours and we may not know where we're going all the time. It's worth it when we know we found it and get to stand on the "X" that marks the spot.

    Your story reminds me of cleaning out the attic after my aunts had passed and the treasures we found in the process. Some were actual treasures in the tangible sense of the word but I placed more value on the old letters and pictures.

    Great piece Aes. Thanks for entering the contest.


    • Yemassee gold member
      September 14
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      This comment is complete gibberish.

      I think an insane clown wrote it,


      • pixiestix gold member
        September 14
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        Oh how you taunt me Mr. Yemassee.


        • Yemassee gold member
          September 14
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          You made a mess of MC's poem! Bad you!


        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          September 14
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          Beware, I see a vision of a tattered wench,
          bubbles arising from snarled wings...


          • pixiestix gold member
            September 14
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            *whispers*

            Keep pretending you think he's funny. That's what I do. lol

            • Yemassee gold member
              September 14
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              Ginger told me you roll on the floor laughing. Of course she just meant generally not specifically pertaining to me.

              • pixiestix gold member
                September 14
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                Please stop calling my dog on the phone. We talked about this Yem. It's not healthy and besides, she doesn't want to talk to you anymore.

                • Yemassee gold member
                  September 14
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                  Phone? She uses your computer. We talk here. She writes better poetry than I do but it's always about possums.


            • Aesthete2000 gold member
              September 14
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              Moi? Pretend?
              The ever so honest Ms. Marvel?


        • Yemassee gold member
          September 14
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          Creepy isn't it. But not as creepy as a Peg leg Pixie.

      • Aesthete2000 gold member
        September 14
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        Not only do you take credit
        for every comment pixie makes,
        now you are turning her
        into a Bonkette!!!!

        Ah, Yemish power reaches out and out...


        • Yemassee gold member
          September 14
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          Bonkette. I think you just created a new character for me! Time for Bonko to get married! lol


          • Aesthete2000 gold member
            September 14
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            Da, dum, ta dah---down the aisle.
            Oh. goody! That will be some wedding!!!


          • pixiestix gold member
            September 14
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            The bearded lady will be very disappointed.


            • Yemassee gold member
              September 14

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              Actually he was having affair with the bearded lady in one of my stories, "Spam Alert" lol

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 14
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      Right, pix--if nothing else is saved
      it is the photographs, espcially those
      in frames. a hint to those who do not
      want to be forgotten!! Frame those pix!

      At one point I suggested, hinted, required
      that my seniors (as in high school) have at
      least one of their drawings or paintings
      framed---for then they would have it forever,
      somehow surviving college and first jobs and
      move upon move. I knew from experience...
      but I digress.

      Thank you, pix, for sharing your always interesting thoughts.

      Aes


  • Olivias Violin
    September 14
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    Cool!

  • amysticwriter silver member
    September 14
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    Lovely story...


  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 14

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    such a sweet, inspiring tale - i really like it. you wrote the dialog very well and capped it off with the tender compelling finish. well done.

  • Yemassee gold member
    September 14
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    Yeah, but did Uncle Buck think Emma was such a prize? lol

    I like it. As you know, I like stories and this is a story. In fact it makes me want to write a new Bubbles tale. She'd love to go out on a treasure hunt, and you just know she'll find some treasure...even if it isn't as valuable as Aunt Emma.

    Maybe Bubbles will take along your little boy. She needs a more willing helper than her brother Egbert.

    Maybe Bubbles should join the Peg leg Pirates.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 14
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      Now that's an idea--Bubbles as a Pirate!
      Would Cap'n Yem be far behind?

      Now don't go knockin' Great-great Uncle Buck's choice of heart throb!
      He and Great-great Aunt Emma may make another appearance.
      An unlikely pair, Uncle Buck of John Candy portrayal and Aunty Em
      of Rainbow Kansas were the first names that popped in my head!

      Ah, let Bubbles seek her treasure---the girl so deserves it
      after surviving all the situations in which you involved her!!
      Besides, the Yemish inspiration still lingers here, with the concept
      of unappreciated book collector, David/Butler still in the air.


      Hmmmmm...does Bubbles like chocolate? Oh, of course she does!

      M-C

      • Yemassee gold member
        September 14
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        I wanted to mention Uncle Buck but was afraid you hadn't noticed that it was a movie and I didn't want to send you into an edit frenzy.

        I'm feeling a new Bubbles or Bonzo story, lol

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          September 14
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          And I will take full credit as is your style to do--
          if a new story emerges!

          I thought of the lovable, but bumbling Candy as Buck,
          accepted but not expected to do a lot.
          Only Great-great Uncle Buck proved
          them wrong, founding the museum!


  • waydownuponjoy
    September 14

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    Well-shared!

    and a good moral to be found in this one! I liked the drawing as well! I'll answer in kind as to my summation of your well-shared philosophy in your author notes:

    The heart of the treasure
    times the mind of the measure
    equals the knowledge for pleasure!

    "to our own selves be true" ... j y

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 14
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      Now that is an equation
      upon which we can extrapolate,
      but I had used up my twenty lines
      that pixie had set as the rate!

      I do love your answer in kind!!!!


      M-C


  • Summer52
    September 14

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    Indeed, Mumsy! You're very right, Never let others judgment (negative) influence your own decision(s) in life.... who knows what treasure you can find in your (heart) map... Great, true love is hard to find and it's more than a gold treasure to keep a lifetime...

    An excellent write.

    good luck!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 14
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      As you so well know, dear summer.
      A warm heart more treasured than cold gold!

      thank you,

      Mumsy


  • arafura gold member
    September 14
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    Great finish! A treasure indeed!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 14
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      Hi, John!
      I had to get to that finish
      before I'd used up my 20 lines.
      Had to get the love story in!

      M-C


  • Denerica
    September 14

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    I really loved this dear friend...captures the scripture where your heart is your treasure would be also, to be that adventure seeking something with dilligence, can't find it anyhow to know it was right where you started. Beautiful and endearing. Excellent. Blessings.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 14
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      Oh, thank you, Denise.
      It is far too easy to be mis-directed,
      to focus on a cause and loose sight
      of what one is meant to achieve,
      despite all odds.

      M-C

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