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Give Me Light

As Linah said to Phelomenah
Take these days and make joy
Too long have the pain tormented
Life has turned hours to nightmares
Plagued by the self same darkness
As hate reign it's kingdom to rule
Waiting in the shadows for bliss
Who eludes at every turn unconquered
One point in time, peace will reign!

Author notes

Prompt: "Waiting in the shadows"

T H E F A E Q U E E N

A contest entry

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  • sgking123
    October 7

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    wow

    this was nicely written poema nd spoke of teh manner in which the jo could be multiplied in rare moments. So thoughtful and structured..i loved this effort all the way dear

  • Macsword
    September 16
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    I hope

    the concluding line in your write becomes the eternal reality one of these days. I like your write here poet.

  • Topnotchsy
    September 15

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    Nice write here. Was the end referring to a time after death? A Messianic time? I wasn't sure exactly what it pointed to. Nice write!!


  • liquidmindforever gold member
    September 14

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    Rich & Curious Piece

    Dear Poet,

    Thank you so much for this thought provoking piece you've entered into
    my contest:"Waiting in the Shadows."

    I'd like to hear more about this piece and Linah and Phelomenah.

    You've left us all in the shadows on this one.

    wishing you the best
    till then
    stay
    liquid