Standing beneath a
Canopy of Trees
I could see the beauty
But didn’t grasp
The Meaning.
Falling in Love
Wasn’t so very hard
But Learning
You must leave -
Well, that was a
Hard trail to make…..
It’s where I learned
Not to bottle it up
And it’s where
You turned the bottle
Back a bit more.
A little too much
Like war.
There’s no doubt
Here, Dear
That we shared
A Love
With roots
That went deep…….
Time Shared
And Alone
Has brought me home.
A place where
The fire is warm
The coffee is always on,
And the door
Is always open,
Or, at the very least,
Unlocked…..
A contest entry
- come now, teach me again, Of Love. by Rob..
1800 points, ended October 12, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Home and harth with the door clsoed but not locked where a friend can enter in, a place of warmth, comfort and peace. I must agree.
You poem is very well written with a nice flow. Again you bring forth the thoughts and stir the thought process destroying the status quo, making the reader reflect, ponder and wonder.
I do love your haunting style. You sneak up on us readers with your spark.
Thank you for sharing.
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"destroying the status quo"
Sweetheart, I don't know that there is a Higher Honor to receive in a poet's soul than that line right there. Thank you so much for all your lovely comments this morning.
ya All~Ways, ~ Jan ~
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Very smooth and well written. I love the transition of the relationship in this piece. I think many of us can relate to it and there is a silent strength here that is alluring. Excellent write
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I love your opening verse and how it sets the tone of the whole piece. What I like is that even though there seems to have been trials your speaker hasn't locked the door to their heart as a result.
Nicely done and good luck in the contest.
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execllent!!
i really liked this piece a lot reminds me of the places my wife and i are the happiest, and thats out in the woods with the fire always warm, the coffee is always on, and the roots are deep very very nice...dino
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I really like this. It goes through the seasons...of loving, of learning, of leaving, and finally best of all...of healing. Really like that last stanza.
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