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You Were Warned

I have wakened from the sleep of my ascension
And I have loosed the awesome power of my hand.
I have given you full reign - my sweet creation -
And I have let you know that it has all been planned.
I have declared to all that I am in command
And have endowed you with fertility of birth.
O children of my womb;  you call me Mother Earth.

You have polluted me with spoils of your lust
And you have vomited your waste upon my face.
You have abused my love and forfeited my trust
And have become the spoiled children of disgrace.
You have defaced my soul rejecting my embrace
And you have dumped your foul plastic in my oceans
You've ignored the tempest storms of my emotions.

Now all the towers of the mighty show decay
As strong and living tendrils crush them to my chest.
I have dissolved the human pestilence away,
And I have cleansed myself of demon minds possessed.
No longer will you children suckle from my breast.
I'm the creator and the mother of you all,
You should have learned to love, before you learned to crawl.

 

 

 

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Inspired by the song by: Gorillaz - Tomorrow Comes Today
This poem is penned in 12 syllable Alexandrine termeter.

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  • SteveS gold member
    November 14
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    Yet another great form by you. Some in-your-face wording along with a message that has volume at the end. Very nice.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    November 14
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    I like the simile used here. I’ve never been a ‘greeny activist’ type but I do believe in being environmentally responsible. The wife and I have been recycling for years.

    You are so adept at these things Amera, you are awesome.


    • Amera gold member
      November 14
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      hehe, thanks MJ, you found an old one. Apparently the contest judge didn't like it.

      • MJ Donnelly gold member
        November 14
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        Eh, their loss. That's why I'm so selective when entering contest any more. I first check out the sponsor to see what their page looks like, who they are, HOW long they have been writing poetry etc. 'Some' of these contest are for the ‘cliquey I don’t have a friggin clue’ crowds, and I'm so not into that.


  • penman gold member
    November 6

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    Incredible

    Wow, what an utterly incredible write. So rich and powerful in your great thoughts. Thank you for sharing


  • daviscth silver member
    November 6

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    Amera, this is nothing short of amazing. I could read the middle verse over and over and ech time it would ring more true. You've created a wonderful poem my friend.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 17

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    How you manage to do these forms is beyond me! The message in here is such a wise one once again.. that end line.. a great twist on learning to crawl before you run, your message makes much more sense. All of us should learn love before we learn anything else!


  • nordicsky silver member
    September 16

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    Hi poetess,
    I always draw so much from your poetry and this is no exception.
    Firstly, I checked out rhyme royal and found that it was a form popular in the late medieval period and that it was used by Chaucer in the “Canterbury Tales.” I went and had a look at this work and now I am looking for a second hand copy.

    Next, I sat back and enjoyed the imagery and the message. Images of landscapes scarred by opencast mining and coastlines polluted by oil spills came to mind. I saw Mother Nature, not soft and serene, but raging, raging against the injustices we do her.

    Thanks for posting this.
    Kind regards, Peter


  • Hetha gold member
    September 15

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    Your artistic interpretation of this song, with the alexandrine meter, has a very Pushkin feel and rhythm, I can definitely jive with. Once I read it a couple of times, to get the feel and rhythm of your meter, I really liked it. Yet, it also displays a deep sense of feminine anger, a righteous anger and a tone, not to be ignored. Certainly, the Children of Earth should have been paying attention. Your tone of speaking as The Great Mother Herself, certainly moves your voice along and the feelings are strong.

    ~Hettie


  • Desire gold member
    September 15

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    Wow~

    Holy Toledo I learned something new
    Especially in reference to 12 syllable Alexandrine termeter...
    Wow try saying that 3 times fast
    Oy~ I have to listen to that song~
    Adore the Message also the weaving of words~
    Pulled me in Powerful Energy Beautiful One
    Excellent~
    Keep that quill dancing

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~

  • catstar
    September 15

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    This is absolutely fantastic! I really enjoyed the read and it is so impassioned I can almost imagine mother nature crying it out.

    This is truly wonderful and I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you very much for sharing it.


  • AtushaAvarus gold member
    September 15

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    Magnificently done!!!

    Ohhh bravo!!!! Yes!! This was very empassioned and exciting! Made me feel the earths tears and want to protect her ever so dearly!!! And I want the mother to punish the wickedly careless!!!

    "You should have learned to love, before you learned to crawl."

    My very favorite!!!

    ~Atusha~
    xoxoxoxo


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    September 14

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    excellent~

    Wow
    What a stellar of a poem you have penned here........
    Love the poem and the awesome imagery as well
    Best of luck in the contest
    I just posted a new one too..........
    Hope you drop by
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


  • darkyinsoul
    September 14

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    Excellence as always my friend
    your imagery superb
    flow is captivating
    love the form
    hope you are well
    Thanks for the share
    Darky


  • PerVirtuous
    September 14

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    A perfect Rhyme Royale. A very well written message of importance for us all!

  • Purrsanthema
    September 14

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    That last line has a real punch to it! As usual, a wonderful poem. It's funny: Mother Earth always tells us that she is in command and we never listen. Let us hope that we have not signed our own death warrant with our destructive negligence.


  • Firequeen
    September 14

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    BRAVO!!!
    done only as you can do dear.
    This is a great piece of writing better then great yet i have no words worthy of it.
    You always manage to blow your reader away.
    you are an amazing writer thank you for sharing your talent with us
    Keep the ink flowing


  • Legend silver member
    September 14
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    Out comes the stamp yet again
    EXCELLENT


  • SteveS gold member
    September 14
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    Cool poem. I like the rhyme choices and the scheme. Definitely a good message. Always interesting.


  • Lulu Gee silver member
    September 14

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    I have no words Amera, you have blown me away with your message and your poem in it's entirity...such a clever girl....love Lulu


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    September 14
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    Great message done in perfect form! Kudo's!


  • Ken-Maverick
    September 13

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    Where do i begin with this...
    i dunno,
    coz its all great!


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    September 13

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    OMG
    This is powerful piece that oozes with dark emotions
    However, it also speaks the profound grim truth about our societies
    The form is neat
    Another form that I have not seem
    You are simply amazing, you rock

    The second stanza really leaves dark imagery
    that sends deep vibes in my mind;
    the disturbed but true picture it paints

    Bravo Thy Queen of Form


    Wish you the best in the contest
    Much love my friend

    David


  • awannabepoet
    September 13

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    And so it was that the great mother we called earth withdrew her weakened breast and the great whore child suckled no more.

    Let rise great tempest, pestulence and total indifference for in the end all suffering shall be terminated and the foul disease called mankind shall be no more!

    awannabepoet


  • Pure Thought silver member
    September 13

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    The message you have well penned here is powerful and too true. I wrote one on here just after I arrived, no where near as eloquently, but with the same message. If we repent and chnge our greedy consumptive ways NOW, we may be able to stay. Otherwise Mother will shake us off like a bad case of fleas.

    Simply perfect.
    Buddy

  • Topnotchsy
    September 13

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    I had never seen this form before (something I find myself saying fairly often when reading your poems) but I love the form, and I really like how you utilized it to provide strong contrast and emphasize point.


  • StarEyes
    September 13

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    Wow! What a read this one is!!! I find I am constantly amazed by your work! And this one.... Holy Smokes Sis! Is beyond words!! Great job! I love it!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 13
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    Wonderfully penned Amera
    Alexandrine what?? lol okay now you and Jeff have me too much
    for me too learn sheesh

    As always nicely penned.

    Love
    Tory


    • Amera gold member
      September 13
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      Thank you Tory,
      It goes like this:
      didiDUMdi didiDUMdi didiDUMdi

      • awannabepoet
        September 13
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        Emphasis non-emphasis...darn it now language has to become evern further enthralled into the mystic arts of Rhythm dare I say.



      • PassionsPromise gold member
        September 13

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        okay but Jeff will tell you i cant even get the diDUM diDUM thing going LOL

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