In a dark and deserted alley
Searching for food,
in a hiddin dumspter
not even the sun will brighten the mood.
The poor little creature,
With bright green eyes, black ears and long tail,
Will always hope for a home.
If they get one,
we cant ever tell.
So when you see one,
a stray that is.
Always remember,
my dear Mr.'s and Mrs.'s.
That one cat turns into another
then more and more.
So help them now,
and make sure not to ignore
ok i know the last line didn't really make sense sorry people!!!=D
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Good Start
I like the content of this poem, and since I'm a cat person myself, I like the potential for making a statement here about getting strays spayed or neutered, but you haven't made your message clear enough. In the beginning, this poem seems more about giving a pet a home. Then, in the end, it seems more about spaying and neutering. Somehow, for me, your message needs to be more clearly stated. Also, structurally, decide if you're going to rhyme or not and keep this component consistent. You've got obvious rhymes in the first and third stanzas but none that I can see in the second. This, however, is an easy fix. I'll be looking forward to seeing the rewrite. Great job, by the way, for someone your age. You're going to be a good one. -
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also the picture doesnt match the discription in the poem!!!! SORRY AGAIN!!!I AM NOT A VER GOOD WRITER!!! -
i love it i have bleeding heart for stray animals
also you can take out line 11 i knew it meant stray cat
read narwhals and poe
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