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when the sun goes down

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The monsters have come again

tiptoeing through these holy halls

greyly lit in dank remembrance of

springy days and carefree nights embraced
with gentle arms and soft intent.

 

They're here!

There, peeking past the curtains drawn

against the coming cold that winter sighs;

their long, tapered, spear shaped fingers

leaving blood stain smudges on the window glass.

 

Eyes!

 Black unruly eyes shrivel up my consciousness

dispatch me to a blacker thought: the world no more

than a feasting place, a haunted cloakroom for

impetuous, murderous deeds....

And all your pleads

and screams to God cannot- will not- evaporate

those stinging, eel infested waters of their

ocean depth eyes.... their dark eyes... dead eyes!

 

I feel much better when the sun is up,

more like a man when the sun is up.

But when his westward blink descends,

when moonlit crevices  appear,

when shadows dull... death's cold

proxy stalks its presence near...

I'm not myself... I'm someone else...

some THING else... some THING

which sings in whispered threats

and weeps in deep foreboding breaths

the curse of me... upon you all...

all that sickly sweet humanity.

The monsters...

Yes, they sneak on silent feet

behind my lulling windows... which dare not to sleep...

they whisper like a lisping wind, a whispered thought

not quite heard... but present all the same...

Yes,

they whisper putrid dreams... nightmares

pierce the coming dim with screams,

agonizing screams which twist and strangle

hearing, pounds the veins inside my head

with crushing waves, raging storms,

lighting strikes of bitter words remembered...

you once said to me... you once

spat at me... on any given day...

I want to watch you bleed.

I want to hear you bleed.

I want to see the life crawl out of you

slither down your arms, your legs

like scarlet serpents seeking shelter

from my sacred vow of heavenly vengeance.

I want to feel the throbbing of your heart

as it slows down...

                         down...

                                  down...

                                           then...

                                                  stops.

I want to touch that joy, that pleasure

watching your eyes close... simply close...

                                                            never...

                                                                    to open...

                                                                                again...

                                                                                        forever.

But it'll pass...

the day will dawn

and it'll pass...

the sun will shine...

I'll see you on the street, we'll chat awhile.

You'll smile, I'll smile, we'll part.

I'll head for home and hope

the night will not come,

the monsters will not come... back...

I'll hope...

but always know within my hidden heart...

they'll soon return...

                          they...

                                will...

                                     return...

Author notes

prompt: Serial Killer
The Pic: I messed with a Rob Bottin design that he created for John Carpenter's The Thing.

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  • Puppydog gold member
    October 3

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    VERY DRAMATIC!!!!!

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    Congratulations on the gold and being acknowledged, this is a deep and dark write!


    • rrw gold member
      October 3
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      Wow, thanks, Pup! This poem seems to be getting a lot of notice and I am really greatful for it. I like the way it turned out... the feel of it seems right to me as does the structure that I chose for it. Thanks again.


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    September 30

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    YOU HAVE BEEN ACKNOWLEDGED

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    Congrats on winning

    this week to be acknowledged.

    with this awesome poem

    penned so well

    hugs Angel♥

    awesome and congrats

    on the gold


    • rrw gold member
      October 1
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      Awwww!

      Thanks, AB, that's really nice of you! I am a little proud of that particular piece. Thanks again!


  • spideracer gold member
    September 22

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    Well you sure got into the mind of a monster, be it serial killer or whatever. Great imagery throughout and the format you chose to use works very well in telling the story here. Great work indeed and congratulations on the gold trophy.

    • rrw gold member
      September 23
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      Thanks, Spidey! I think this one I just allowed myself to just get into that frame ofmind where delusion and physical pain meet.


  • Deaths Prayer
    September 22
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    The thing was not a serial killer LOL


    • rrw gold member
      September 23
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      hmmm, are you sure? Does have qualities of a serial killer... Heeheehee!

      • Deaths Prayer
        September 23
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        I just remember the film...I don't remember monsters being serial killers..even though the film is good..congrats on the gold....I was just pissed I never won LOL

        I think your style even though it through me a bit...not use to it being all over the place I think your style impressed the judge!

        • rrw gold member
          September 23
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          No, the monster wasn't a serial killer... I's just funnin' Carpenter says in the comentary on the DVD I got that The Thing was a symbol for AIDS and cancer... I just used the pic for the "monsters" in the character's head because its the one that haunts me most from the movie.
          But I am truly interested in why the "style" or format threw you?


  • Ich bin das Ender
    September 20
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    AH! Ho;y Hell some one else who apreciates John Carpenter's work! Sweet deal

    • rrw gold member
      September 23
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      One of the GREATEST of the 80s films! Due primarily to Bottin and Winston's special effects. I show it each semester to my American Horror Film class. The special effects are STILL awesome!


  • Melee Vau gold member
    September 15

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    monsterous poem

    love this piece - one of the best poems I have read on AP (and there are some really good works here) - I'm worried that I can seriously relate to the serial killer - as the moon slowly rises.........

    • rrw gold member
      September 23
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      Eeeek! Watch that moon! Thanks for the compliment... If this poem is half as good as you say, a lot of the credit goes to Red (below me here) for inspiring it with this contest AND her own work...


  • redmoonnrizing silver member
    September 13

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    Stunning piece of work!!! Great imagery and diction! I really do think these people are possessed to do the things they do....GREAT WRITE!!! Welcome to the finalist list!!! Thanks for entering and Good Luck in the Contest!


    • rrw gold member
      September 23
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      Thanks, Red! And thanks for the heads-up on the contest! Everyone did a splendid job... great contest!

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