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Stop Time

I thought you were the one
You said you would always love me
Day after day
You said you were happy

Loneliness sets in

As the pain encases my entire being

Tiny pieces of my heart fall

Darkness becomes so comforting

 

Wishing I could turn back time

Fix whatever broke us apart

Keep us together for life

Take it back to the start

 

I wish I could somehow bring you back

Look into your deep brown eyes

Telling me how much you love me

Together we would spend our lives

 

I wish you were in my arms

Your warm body next to mine

Feel your lips once again

So i could keep us here and stop time

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  • ZetaWolf Of Light
    September 19, 2009

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    second to last line should be "Feel your lips" instead of "Feel you lips". For me its not so much about correction cause I know I am not a very good poet its about emotions and feeling being written down on paper so that they can be let out.

  • ZetaWolf Of Light
    September 13, 2009
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    Great job keep up that writing.