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Nathaniel

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You found me broken on the sand
My life changed when you took my hand
As your brilliant blue eyes stared right into mine
I knew right then I didn't want to die

You saved my life and made me see
There was so many ways I could be free
You showed that the darkness didn't have to be there
You told me that You'd always care

On the roof at night staring at the stars
Together we made plans to take life far
We had it all right there at our feet
Dreams can come true you made me believe

You cleaned the mess
{when all I did was bleed}
You were the crutch
{when all I did was need}
You were the light
{when my life was dark}
You were the glue
{when I fell apart}

Since you left my life that  night
I often sit in the dark and cry
but just before I fall apart
Your voice brings me out of the dark

Nate, I used to think you'd lied
You'd said you'd always be there
Then one night you suddenly died
and it just wasn't fair...

&&
Even though you left my earthly life,
You left a piece of you behind
&&
I know you're still my guiding light
As you wait for me on the other side

Author notes

His name was...
Nathaniel Luke Hewitt

He was..
My Savior
My Soul Mate
My Best Friend
My First Love

He died
26th Dec 1995
Age 19

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  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    September 29

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    AHa, slightly less colourful that the last entry. But still just as eye catching...Using your gold to full potential, I see...!!

    Wow, this is already different from the other entries I've read... It rhymes, which these days is rare.., and the first stanza jumps straight into the story, instead of giving about 14 stanzas worth of background.

    Your first line, for example-
    You found me broken on the sand
    You immediately wonder why she was broken, and who found her.
    Excellent way to start!

    There was so many ways I could be free
    I love that line, it's so full of hope...!

    Your rhyming is somehwat simplistic, but it makes sense, and you break it with...

    You cleaned the mess
    {when all I did was bleed}
    You were the crutch
    {when all I did was need}

    Awwww.... true story??? So sad!"!
    It's started so happy, and so full of hope. And then it takes a sudden dive, but you don't expect it.
    Incredible.

    Finalist you are...!

    Awwww... authors notes...
    I wish you strength...

  • OurxBeginning
    September 14

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    A wonderful tribute you've weaved together here. I really enjoyed it. The emotions were deep and bittersweet. Nice bg, very pretty. I hope your wounds have somewhat healed.


  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 13

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    i'm at a loss of words to speak to you loss, as such i'll share where your words touched my heart.

    You cleaned the mess
    {when all I did was bleed}
    You were the crutch
    {when all I did was need}
    You were the light
    {when my life was dark}
    You were the glue
    {when I fell apart}

    beautifully done. thanks for sharing.


  • here for you always
    September 12

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    This is so sad . I'm sorry you lost someone so special to you. He sounds like he was a great guy. I know that nobody is gonna replace him but hopefully you'll find someone just as important. thank you for sharing and best of luck.