I looked at the sky tonight and realised the light from the stars was 4 years old. It was a strange feeling to be looking at the past, I felt like it should be in black and white and torn around the edges; an old rediscovered photograph.
I don’t think I ever told you my world collapses when you’re not around - the words clogged up my throat and dirtied my fingertips. I never realised how love consumes a person before I met you. Love is so selfish.
I think the sun defiles night skies; there’s something almost holy about them and the sun ruins and spoils the silent darkness. It frustrates me and leaves me wondering between sunsets in a haze of bitter confusion.
I’ll keep on having lucid dreams ‘till pinching myself doesn’t wake me anymore.
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E l e c t r i c B l o o m
prompt; When the sun sleeps
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Beautiful title and well described;-)
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Well now, this was a pretty little piece
The sky often fascinates me also. One day we'll marvel at it together
Well done.
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You know I love your work. This is no exception.
Beautiful.
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These are some very interesting thoughts. I've thought kind of the same thing looking at the night sky, about looking into the past, but nothing ever popped into my head about old photos. And the bit about the sun was really good.
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This is some awesome writing, I love the last sentence, the title gives the poem an awesome sort of accent, tint, whatever you want to call it.
Reading this just cast a whole sort of aura around my thoughts and got me daydreaming about maybe watching an entire day and night pass from the same hillside.
You are a great writer.
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WOW!
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I really like this, very beautiful. Your word choice is brilliant!
Though I don't think the last sentence fits.
Thanks for your entry! Good luck
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