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Seashells

 

S eashells – one of nature’s jewel S .
E ach unique in varied color and hu E .
A gift of love and beauty from the se A ,
S oftly tossed and left upon the sand S ,
H ollowed and polished smoot H .
E ach the remnant of a lif E
L eft as a memoria L ,
L iltingly acoustica L
S oftly shussing seashell song S

 

 

Author notes

A mirrored acrostic - both the first and last letters of each line form the subject word.

I was looking through a box of stuff - you know the kind that collects in your basement - and came across a tin of seashells that my kids collected when they were young... tiny jewels of memory

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  • Hikari Lady
    September 24

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    This was impressive! You managed to mantain a smooth form of beginning and ending acrostic and yet keep the depth of the write with great imagery. Indeed well written. I'd have prefered if the letters concerning the prompt weren't capitalized and spaced away from the words, it kinda took from the flow and made reading it difficult. Otherwise, I loved and enjoyed this. Thanks for entring and good luck. ♥

    Love
    ~Noor


  • CoundessaScarlotti
    September 15

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    Wow... this had to take you FOREVER! I'm really impressed. Great job


  • GotLilt
    September 14
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    This is awesome! Love the form


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    September 13

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    What

    a lovely gem! I never saw an Acrostic like this before & you penned this so effortlessly. Marv content, word choice & timing. I love acrostics, but I think this type would be quite difficult for me. All the best in the contest. I love the last three lines that you end this beautiful piece with. This is a winner to me.


  • toomysterious
    September 13

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    Trust a poet to turn a dusty old box of relics from the past into a shining work of art. This is a hard form to pull off so well, but then, you are an expert. Never stop sharing.


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    September 13

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    Aww, how sweet your AN's are..and your acrostic is awesome. Just beautiful Ken.. It makes me remember a tranquil time way back when.


  • Jesann gold member
    September 13

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    Simply lovely...brings memories of collections with my own children... still kept..!!
    The smaller shells sitting in a large shell... in the bathroom.
    Another very creative mirrored acrostic.
    Just the word "SEASHELLS" prompts so many memories..."tiny jewels of memory", I quite agree... thanks for sharing.
    Well done.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 12

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    hmm this poem is very soothing to me anyway. reminds me of when I was little and my parents and went to the ocean, and along the shore were so many different seashells all unique in their own way. Beautiful poem, love the mirrored acrostics.

    Good luck
    Kat

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