(balance)
I would like to say I'm balanced, but it doesnt fit. I'm flat and two dimensional where it counts.
Otherwise i'm stratospheres of colour and shape. I'm yellow and blue at the same time; but I still can't manage to mix a green.
(unbalanced)
My ability to end up with five dollars and fifteen cents in the bank is littered in a cacophany of failure. It would probably help though, If I started with more then five dollars and twenty.
(balance)
I get told that I'm one-sided and biased, that *explosion-of-burning-seared-skin* can have a sunset of colours, a multitude of reasoning. that its the middle of U shaped politics, and if you arent for the *kill-explosion-racism-massacre* then u must be biased and unbalanced. If you're against the *razor wire torture* you must be a "radical extremist".
(unbalanced)
I may be unbalanced, I may be inclined to reject gossamer skies of blood. I may be fire engine red, but red is a primary colour, and I am primary and elemental.
I may be rummaging around in the bottom of Pandora's box, but the box has never folded through overuse, and the people have historically fought back.
I only wish to join them.
A contest entry
- 600 x 75 by individuality.
897 points, ended September 13, 9 entries
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I came upon this in the "featured" box and I really don't know what to make of it - I feel a few explanations or asides in the author's notes would not have come amiss! One word of warning: NEVER OPEN PANDORA'S BOX!
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I guess in the end we are both balanced and unbalanced really it matters what time of day, where you are who you are with and .....what coulor you are wearing!! Great write thanks for sharing
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This is...
a wonderful read and I think it shows a "quandary of balance" which is probably something all poets require a monthly shot of. Good write here poet.
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I like it, fits in with the vein of writing that I like, wonderfully exploited with great, unique imagery and all done with wordings and situations that aren't common. You push the envelope and do it so well.
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I fixed the gramatic mistakes I could see. I hope its all of them! if you mean
"u" in things like colour its because I'm Australian, so if i saw the word "color" in my work to me it would be spelt topsy-turvy and wrong. I hope you can accomodate for the fact we speak very slightly different "languages". If all else fails blame colonisation
Bec
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a good piece of poetry which you have presented here, though you mix things up a little, im then i'm, then u being used, it doesn't appeal to my eyes when i see that.
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an interesting piece to read with such uniquely expressed vivid images and thoughts contained but not quite pinned down. a joy to read and smile knowingly along with. very nice.
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I like your perspective. Your poem is a mixed palette of life, you managed to present flip sides of many aspects. Good!
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