Connection fades away
leaving our lavender blossoms wilting
as each photograph of us
falls in the trash.
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prompt: leaving you behind
A contest entry
- in just 17 words .... by Lavender Butterfly.
450 points, ended September 13, 17 entries
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such imagery...loved it!!
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You've expressed a world of emotion in these few words. I've thrown away a few photographs, some of family some of old boyfriends, etc and later regreted losing them.
But photos can bring back all kinds of memories, some of which can hurt along with the ones which bring us joy, and some even bring both kinds of memories.
This is a very good piece and I wish you best of luck in the contest
Dee
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Thank you so much!
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It's fantastic what you wrote in so few words.
This reminded of a painful break-up I went through when I was 23. I was very much in love, but she went back to her ex-husband. I do still have a couple of photos of my first love from high school. Fortunately, my wife and I aren't the jealous types.
Don
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I can't throw them in the trash. I end up putting them away in some old book and never look at them, but to throw them away, it's odd, but I can't. I guess the memories of the good times still mean something...in some minuscule way, lol
But I know the feeling...and one old girlfriend I did throw every photo away and now wish I'd just kept one, just to remember what she looked like. I really can't remember, lol
But this poem is about emotion and hurt and that feeling of a permanent end...and works as such.
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I have actually done this twice and regret doing it. I think I have learned my lesson. lol.
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life fades as the blooms wither
and fall off the stem of life
colors remain subtle and cast
a shadow of doubt from a photographers
point of mind.. well said I love this Hun
hugs Angel♥
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Thank you so much for your beautiful comment.
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you are welcome hun well said awesome thoughts♥
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Etheral beauty that haunts
This very four lines was my life for a moment...what perfection you have used to express .. This is an exceptional pen. Simple, visual, heart-breaking. Kudos
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incredibly profound... x
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Thank you so much!
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You paint such a sad picture here, McBatman and quite well I might add. You've managed to say so much in so few well chosen words.
I think the use of the color lavendar for the blossoms for example further emphasizes the loss, the "fading" of what was most likely a vibrant purple at one time...also a color of passion.
Nicely done.
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This was true thing that happened about 8 years ago. The realization that the relationship was over didn't hit me until I threw each picture of her away one at a time after staring at them heart broken. Thanks for reading and commenting Kittiestix!
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I'm sorry it's a true story. Sometimes it does take action like that for the reality to set in. I guess in a way it could also be a form of closure which we need before we can move on.
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faded pictures
how nostalegic and sad. such a vivid image you have created in so few words. bravo!!
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Thank you so much!
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The words, the presentation
unite to create a silent ache
on the page, no sound
but the almost imperceptible
flutter of one photograph
after another, falling.
T-D, you make visual
the sadness of heartbreak.
Quiet kudos to you...
M-C
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Thank you so much....you hit the nail on the head with this comment.
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