ivory skin stretched over bones
so broken already in a body so young
bruised and broken she screams
but even she can't hear it anymore
her last words were lies
her first words were lies
every word she ever spoke
were just more lies
he got sick of hearing them
the same "i love you" emotionless
empty and paranoid he ripped
the last lie from her throat
before she could say anymore
he wrapped the ruby puddle
around a rug of pure platinum
waiting and watching
for another lie to come
out of stitched together lips
he still is sitting there
still motionless
still waiting for another lie
to escape her lips
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A contest entry
- Surrender To My Madness (Round Two) by Agrona.
700 points, ended September 26, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Beautiful twists and violent turns. We yearn to know the truth and only find lies. Watch and wait but nothing will come. Well done my dear.
Your Czarina,
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thank you ever so much ^^
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Hmm, i wonder where this cam from. It is a good write, very thought provoking. Have you ever properly explained it to him?
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actually it is fiction. and i'm not able to explain anything to anyone if they dont talk to me...
thanks hon <3
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Some striking imagery you have hear, and it's bleeding emotion. Very well done!
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very many thanks... but was that last bit [bleeding emotion] meant to be wordplay? XP
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It meant to be a compliment, and perhaps some word play. There's a lot of emotion in it is what I'm saying.
haha, check that out ^^ "in" "it" "is" and "I'm" all within five words!
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aaaarrrrrrrrrrrgggggggggggghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!! too many short words!!
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The part about the presumed false love ties this poem together nicely. Really cool.
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thank you ^_^
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good penning.. very descriptive. I enjoyed reading your work. Good luck in your contest.
Well penned..
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thanks ^^
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whoah! awesome imagery..... I don't know if I spelled it right... but ^_^ I try!
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lol yes you did. thanky!
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The only thing I can say is wow
. I think your poem is really awesome. This is my favorite part: "her last words were lies
her first words were lies
every word she ever spoke
were just more lies". Great job on this writing. Love and Peace!
-Jess
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awh thanks!
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Your Welcome
-Jess
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Your last line is just, Stunning.
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thanks miss mango ^_^
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