I'd like to tell you everything, about you that I love
unfortunately I can't, because the list would be too long.
These past few weeks I've taken in so much from you
the good and bad, doesn't matter, so long as I am with you
It's been so much fun that it has me excited
every time we start our long walk home
and whenever you talk to me I'm delighted
because I'm so lucky to be with you alone
I know it's still too early, to say that you are mine
but just look at it my way, and see how I define
I can see the sparks starting a flame, that we can feed over time.
If you look closer, you'll be surprised as to what you find.
Isn't it horrible? Probably the worst I've written like ever!
What do you think specifically about thsi write?
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I know it's still too early, to say that you are mine
but just look at it my way, and see how I define
I can see the sparks starting a flame, that we can feed over time.
If you look closer, you'll be surprised as to what you find.
~~ i find that part closely alluring, intrigues me so
great.
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Awe...it is so endearing, sweet, an innocence of young love, you sound sincere son, keep writing this way, show your heart, even to give it as a love letter possibly. Well done. Blessings.
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wow
this is an amazing piece, i really liked it.
I says a lot and holds a lot of emotion.
I enjoyed reading it and dont think its horrible
or anything. Great job and keep scribbling
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