Stars
are always falling, stalling mid plummet, summit above... as if waiting; waiting to sprout wings of gold. Hold forever near to heart, parting not even to breathe. Leave in sadness your tears, fears has not part in love. Fly away with me above sea, midsection of cross-roads, space... and time dissolves with each kiss. Bliss saturates lips as I pause to fall into the weave of your embrace. Your ink sink... surging through my vein, plain before you, adornment's secrets revealed. Filled... lunar rotations spill like dew from buttercup, weakened by your saturation, elation's hesitation thieves me like rogue seeking possession. Obsession breaks concentration as you ration out gale sparingly mid my gray sky. Forgive this tattered star that burns fervent inside... my descent imminent. Destiny's course my fall into your hands... as I surrender immortality for the life of a rose, and at the fate of man. Close the heavens... that I may lose breath left in your embrace. Dim heaven's lamps... for the night is blue if I remain among galaxies without you. Old souls illusion in a world of disbelief.. both harboring an old love, a sanctuary of relief. Wings have fallen from me, but the clouds... the clouds lay like hands embued with stance to catch my feeble frailty. Seconds to mid of night, light separates the sky by thimble of thread. Divine love in me, I give up divinity.. stretch arms my mortal love... catch me.
Author notes
Prompt: 1. "Love is my permission to be who I am, no inhibitions because you understand." --Chrisette Michele
2. "Someone asked me what I loved most about life. I smiled and replied, 'The person that I'm with right now.'" --Source Unknown
3. "It's never too late to live happily ever after!" --submitted by Denise
4. "Explaining how much I love you is like explaining how water tastes, it's impossible!" --submitted by Tia
5. "In my thoughts of you there is an underlying love that is present in every word, every glimpse I hope you feel it as I do, for it is what I am and ever I will be."
Venturer
A contest entry
- Lovingly Quoted 2 by Heavenly Angel.
700 points, ended September 25, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"the weave of your embrace"
"as I surrender immortality for the life of a rose"
Those are very nice lines. I really took to them. I wish you would steer clear of cliche images. When you use common place poetic images, they don't allow for reader exploration of thoughts and effect. The common ones just don't faze because we've become desensitized to them. But you're capable of stepping outside of the box of norm. Is it just easier to follow reader expectations?
On a more abstract note, you seem more down lately.
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This is quite beautiful with so many lines that just held me, I would be quoting the entire piece to list them. Emotion pours throughout this expression of deep love; its intensity truly heightened by your choice of gentle words to bathe the reader.
Thank you for sharing this with me. Wonderful prose.
~Pamela 
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Beauty~
Oh My this is a Gem my Friend and Love the Images also the Emotion
that You pen
Powerful Energy also inner woven rhyme which grabs
Excellent take on the prompts~ This swells the eyes and Flows...
with a smile upon the Heart
Keep that quill dancing
Thank You for sharing Your Spirit
Best wishes in the contest
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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wow!!! mastery perfection hun - the images that are painted in my mind from your words brought tears of wishes of love that seems forever lost -- i may as well not even enter as wouldnt stand a chance against you xxx well done and many blessings always xxxxx
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Wonderfully done!!!
This is wonderfully done!!! Your words, your prose style is remarkable!!! I love it!!! So inviting and beautifully done and expressed. Your words are so defined and paint the most perfect picture. Good luck in this contest!! I absolutely love this piece!!!
Kisses!!!!
xoxoxoxo
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So very beautiful this is!
Oh, my friend, I LOVED this!
Your words are awesome!
Thank you for sharing and being part of the contest; all the best to you!!!
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ohhhh what a take from the quotes beautiful prose..one that captured the stars..and i feel like i'm holding one right now ...very light ...but still so intense...the way you ended is perfect..
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