my home... my family...
everything i've ever known
gone
to wake up in a haze of smoke
surrounded by fire
this is what hell must be
it's strange, the scene I've woken up to
snow falls softly, innocently covering the earth
while fires consume everythin that's left of my life
I look around to find no one left
corpses littler the streets and my body is chilled to the bone
as i stare death in the face
looking up I see a peacful night sky
stars still shine, clouds drift by slowly
and the moon has never seemed so pure
yet the red I dance in, mourning what I've lost
will not stop until everything is destroyed
it's greedy, taking everything from everyone here
i stumble down the street, searching for my home
eyes unseeing the bodies I pass
legs numb, i barely notice i'm moving
my home collapses in a cloud of embers
my family spread across the town i love
nothing is left for me now
remorse and pain are all I have to look forward to
it seems as if this scene is already burned into my mind
losing the last of the things i love
tears silently run down my cheek
as I fall to my knees in grief
waiting to be taken as well
please, i dont mind if it's painful
i dont mind if i go through agony
just please, dont leave me alone in this world
fires reach my body and start burning away my flesh
i feel nothing, lifeless as i am by now
only the fires are alive to witness my life disappearing
scarlet drops on a white surface
our blood covers the streets
as the snow continues to fall
covering our bodies softly
wrapping us gently in it's arms
protecting our empty shells as much as it can
embers, snow, and despair
that is what's left of my life now
that is what's left of my home
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You did ver ywell on this E. =] The imagery is spectacular. I particularly love the line "the red I dance in". It's always good to hear someone describe fire in a new way. x
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Thanks. I'd say I tried hard on it, but I'd be lying. Really, all I did was write what I saw in my head. So there you go! *hugs*
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I sincerely hope nothing like this ever happens... to anyone. It's every vehement... evoking a huge amount of emotion and carrying it through to the end. Great job!
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WOW
...i'm speechless..... this is by far my fav of ur work E. ur imagery captivated me. ur sorrow was remorseful and overwhelming... this took my breath away.. just.... wow...
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Thank you. I highly appreciate such kind words from such a hard person to please. I'm very happy you liked it as much as I did writing it.
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now tell me.... how do you make those little stars?
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Ouch
so sad a story. I am left wondering to what extent this is truth and what parts are fictional! I feel the pain in the words and hope that you are safe and sound. Love and kisses, The Shaker
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It's all fictional, actually. My goal was to get a scene of complete despair, what hell to me would be, and see if my readers agree. Did I do alright?
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