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Escape

You reek of lacklustre cravings
hunting down bodies,
base emissions guide you
down dark alleys,
pulling me too

You never know my designs
that defeat your intents,
what I need beyond immersions,
purgation of senses, hunger
for more of what exists not

I see it coming, feel it
passing through my cells,
newly formed feathery desires,
grab it while I can and let it
slip through shaky fingers

I embrace the vanishing
fragrance and look back at
you, me, and the life I left
for inner peace, forked lust
that licks me clean





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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    September 14

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    Humm..congrats for the Gold...the reality, if ,is placed..that deserves the gold..and you are the creator of the "sense" of truth to make the sense to every one of us..a great story you narrated to interpret the life..well done..


  • liquidmindforever gold member
    September 13

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    "passing thorugh my cells,"


    Dear Poet,

    So pleased you joined my contest:"Lust," with your submission, "Escape."


    "what I need beyond immersions,
    purgation of senses, hunger
    for more of what exists not"

    i don't know a lot of people, poets included that would experientially grasp
    what you have spoken in the above stanza. I do and of course Tantra Yoga does
    as well.

    The ending is painfully perfect.

    I like to point out possible hiccups in the event you'd like to correct them, as i do.

    in the top line, did you mean "through?" If so, i'd appreciate your editing and when
    complete im with title and contest:"Lust."

    I am placing your poem into the finalists, regardless; however, it would be
    more polished if corrected, if not intentional.

    wishing you the best
    till then
    stay
    liquid
    finalist

    • ashjoe76
      September 13
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      Thanks a lot for pointing out the error. I corrected it.

  • liquidmindforever gold member
    September 11
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    Dear Poet,

    Thank you so much for entering my contest semi-quickie "lust"

    Please place your username spaced out into author notes.

    Once complete, please im with title and contest prompt "lust"

    till then
    wishing you the best
    and stay
    liquid