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Parallel

Wheeeeeeeeeeee!
Here I go again
Jump jump jump
Bounce off the household furniture
Talky talky talky
Doesn't matter who's around
Nothing matters at all
Blah blah blah
Wheeeeeeeeeeee!
Happy happy happy
Squee squee squee

Meh
Here I go again
Fall fall fall
Hide under a table or in the corner
Cry cry cry
Doesn't matter who's around
Doesn't matter at all
Silence silence silence
Meh
Sad sad sad
Die die die

Author notes

Written on 5th April 2004 at 00:22 GMT

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  • PrettyRagDoll
    June 28, 2005
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    Hmm... I liked how you used the same formatting in both the first and second stanzas but wrote them to contradict each other. I loved the dramatic difference between the two. You had good word choices! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • mesmerize me
    June 28, 2005
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    Great, very amusing

    I like this.It amused me quite a bit.I love it,made me smile real big,it reminded me of someone on speed, taking some uppers then a downer.Great job.And good luck in the contest.
    -Ashley


  • E A Collins
    June 28, 2005
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    Good job

    Great job of summing up the bipolar modality. I would have liked a third verse, showing the inner-talk that happens in the space inbetween. Most folks I know with this affect have some sense of the rise and fall. That would have given more depth to this write.
    Peace,
    Ed


  • -LizBTropez-
    April 6, 2004
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    I think the poem showed both sides, and the sudden change certainly was appropriate. Good job.


  • DefinitiveFreak silver member
    April 4, 2004
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    Yay, I got a standing ovation! Thank you very very much! My poem was very strange, but it fitted the mood I was in at the time. In the space of time it took to write that poem, my mood changed exactly how it was written. Weird.


  • April 4, 2004
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    now this is what i was looking for
    the definitive bipolar experience!
    absolutely brilliant
    you get a standing ovation,
    bravo, bravo, bravo!
    ~liz
    (p.s. only 62? congratulations!)

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