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Inside the Hourglass

Missing image





                        siphoned
                        through thinned walls of
                        hope,    …past the paled summit
                        of dreams. Stillborn sands of ‘once was’
                        this heart.

























~

Author notes

"I hone this ache of pen and parchment,
this deep well of language
and its slow whisper beyond the edge of dream."

-Night Hope in http://allpoetry.com/poem/5692487

Wanders, my dear friend, I'm apologizing now!! These few lines took me somewhere completely different than the beautiful poem they came from. Love ya, sweetie!!

Picture credit: "Running Hourglass" ~ artist unknown
http://images.google.com/images?gbv=2&hl=en&q=hourglass&sa=N&start=280&ndsp=20

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  • Danny Beatty gold member
    November 17

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    you have an elegant style of composition which is apparent even in your shorter pieces, as this example displays ... I am glad to see my Baby's words has inspired this lovely piece and you were amply and justifiably awarded the gold for your efforts ... bravo, Mad Moon ... a simple, yet complex piece it is, too


  • poeticweaver gold member
    September 30

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    Congrates on the Gold sweet sis! I absolutely love this write.. Paints the picture so vivid, and it sticks there with ya so beautifully.. because your writing rocks! thanks for sharing, I love ya!

    Your bro, Timothy


  • poetryality silver member
    September 18

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    BRAVO!






    It is amazing how much you espoused with so few words. Your expressions written here speak so clearly to the lapsing of time. We tend to look ahead despite how many years have already passed. This is glorious!

    CONGRATULATIONS ON EARNING A WELL DESERVED GOLD CHALICE!


    Always Loving YOU ♥

    Renee


  • crivanea silver member
    September 17

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    wow....you left me quite speechless with this write..although i understand the background edge..it did kinda distract me..but nevertheless..the way you write this poem...a different take on the prompt.but still..i can image time ticking away in a quickie contest


  • Nicolette gold member
    September 15

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    This cinquain shows your poetic ability and big heart, my friend. Beautiful and so very moving.

    Big 's to you

    ~ Nicolette

  • Rowan gold member
    September 13

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    simply sighs...
    beautifully sad. Loved 'paled summit'. A very moving cinquain.


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 11

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    First of all, dear Luna, do not apologize for where the pen takes you, ever. Least of all to me, who understands that all too well. Lord knows, you've read plenty of my "darker" pieces over the years and tolerated 'em quite well, too. I think you've done a marvelous job, and in so few words, and in the beloved cinquain form, besides. Annnnnnnnnnnd...I borried yer picher, too. Hehe. (See towards the bottom of my author's page - I did a cool blue wash on it). Good luck in crivanea's contest, my Friend.





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