Your journey to the towers
(unwitting final hours)
was full of daily joy
The excitement of a boy
(it was his first time on the train)
made you smile and thank the Lord
that we live in such a world
Your journey from the towers
(falling down like Autumn showers)
was full of fear and pain
The unending thoughts of home
(one you wouldn't see again)
made you scream and beg the Lord
not to take you from this world
Please tell me what you think
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Fantastic!!!!
Reading this piece immediately brought tears to my eyes. You have the absolute masterful ability to invoke a reader's emotion! Your weaving of lyrics is remarkable. I don't know any amateur (you should be a professional) poet with your combination of creative and technical skill.
"The excitement of a boy
(it was his first time on the train)
The unending thoughts of home
(one you wouldn't see again)"
In two, different stanzas, you wrote a rhythmic verse.
BEAUTIFUL
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