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Infestation

such, such, the pain of love,
which crawls inside my skin,
and scatterers toxic filth around,
and merges into sin,

such, such, the time of day,
when rotten food is left,
and creepy crawlies jump at me-
an enraged, frenzied theft,

such, such, the passion flows,
as bugs start crashing round,
and set their creepy crawly bomb,
my heart is smashed and ground.

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  • swim.x
    October 21
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    tis me here. commentin on ur poemz.


  • Sunkissed xo
    October 4

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    uhmm wow?
    you little freaaak this is gorgeous
    so well written as always x


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 1

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    Powerful imagery here...Vivid...one can see and smell the pictures you paint here...My you are excelling in your writing! M.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 17

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    Ahhh love... like the ticking time bomb under our skin,.. yes it can indeed feel like that at times... and other times, it can be a sweet intoxication. A powerful piece here.


  • sgking123 silver member
    September 17

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    wow

    Love pangs accompanied by such....creatures and their left over acts...lol..it was a fantastic contrast.I loved the feelings and pangs.....you actually made me feel all that....only that I was searching for craetures acts around me........thanks for sharing...visit me and read me..i have similar genre shared with ya


  • swim.x
    September 11
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    scatterers --> scatters

    awesome. again.



  • Spiritual Soul gold member
    September 11

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    I love how you repeat Such, it's almost like your contemplating the pain of love or the time of day. Beautiful and emotional write. Loved it, good luck in the contest!!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~

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