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  The house was old and abandoned. Windows were borded shut and the plants and grass were all dead. Stairs were broken in several places and the doors creeked when the wind blew. Fadded carpet covered the floor in an dark red while a thick layer of dust coated everything.
  Past noon, the sun was beginning to set. Stefan slowly went up the wooden stairs. All sound was deminished in the house, not a single cricket churped. Movement from the shadows drew his eye. Then an eree scream filled the air followed by the sound of hissing.
  He knew those sounds. His love always screamed like that if she was scared and he knew only too well that he had made the same noise when he first heard it, a vampire was attacking her.
  Racing up the steps, he broke down the door to the room she was in. He was at her side in a second. Taking up a protective stance in front of her, he hissed a warning at the vampire on the other side of the room. Emediately two others were in the room with them.
  The one that had scared Megan was about as tall as he was with long brown hair. He wore a black leather coat with a torn white shirt and blue jeans that had a few holes. His shoes were white and muddy with dark blue stripes.
  A slight noise from behind had him spinning around. A fourth vampire had materialized there and grabbed Megan. This one was wearing almost all black. Cold eyes stared into his and he heard a small female voice wisper his name as the boy disapeared with her.
  "Stefan!"

  Jerking awake, he realized it was just a dream. Or in this case, a nightmare. Stefan sat up in bed and noticed a shadow moving near him. He sat motionless, not even daring to take a breath. "That was a pretty wicked dream," it said in a low voice then moved into the light.
  "Brian, what are you doing in here? Why were you invading my dream?" His breath came out in a soft hiss. ~There better be a good reason for listening to my dreams or I'll let mom know. You know how she hates it when you do that, she forbid it. She would send those thorny plants of hers after you.~ He sent the silent message to his brother and watched him laugh.
  "I can dodge her plants." He said after he caught his breath from laughing so hard. "You were saying her name in your sleep, 'Megan, no, not Megan.' I wanted to see if I could help you any so I woke you up to stop the dream." His eyes showed his pain from his memories when his kateline had been taken by humans.
  "There were four... One orbbed in and out. Do you know any vampires that can orb? Could it be real in any way? Though Megan is a human I still need to protect her." Stefan knew that if you've found your love, you could have premenitions about them. It was one of the things that helped vampires keep their love alive. ~If they harm a single hair on her head, no matter how soon it be, I'll kill them. I will not let her be taken by them~
  Brian inclined his head in agreement. "You're infatuated with her. I understand how you feel. When my Kate was stolen from me I wanted to hunt and kill everyone of those sick men. I went into a rage of bloodlust." Lapsing out a moment, he thought about what happened and shuttered. "Be careful, I don't know any that can orb but I won't doubt it's a warning." He left and Stefan was alone.

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this is a part of the book i'm writing and i wanted to see if alot of people would, if it were finished, read it.

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  • Rosefrn silver member
    September 19, 2009

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    First I'll just point out some small mistakes:
    first paragraph:
    creeked: creaked
    fadded: faded
    6th paragraph:
    wisper: whisper

    This is a really exciting story. I'd love to read more!


  • Stormy Days
    September 11, 2009
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    sweet I love the detail Stephen is the name of a sword master in my book lol ^_^ very good I like it want to read more more more now