your breath is
cloud that breaks
before the storm
to rain reflection
into ponds of earthen clay
so these eyes can view
this soul that greets you with
reciprocation
A contest entry
- Quickie #52 by amaranthine lover.
1000 points, ended September 18, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Reader interpretation and critical comment welcomed
Comments
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Hood-Wink!
Such a nice poem here and ah the good likening at the first of your poem, it was so original and poetical in my eyes. I just thought of the lines and ah how soft you wrote it!
Thank you for sharing this nice poem with us and congrasts on your trophy
~Massy~
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forgot happy clappies
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Hoodwinked 139
I thought this was about relationships and seeing into the person's soul, having love that is reciporcated. It is nicer when it is reciporcated. You have been hoodwinked because someone cared about you. -
HOODWINKED!
Your imagery presents vivid images here to evoke much thought...Keep penning poet!
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wow
wowohooo....i am stirred by this one..this was so cute and nice....deep spiritual and yet romanticallly emotional. You put the object of yor affection on a lofty perch......quite heavenly this one. -
hood~winked!!!
this is beautiful! you are being hoodwinked by a poetic bandit. congrats on the honorable mention but in my opinion this should have been gold. i like it that much. keep writing! God bless you always
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Hood-Wink!
The first two lines captivate me and have me paused as I continue to read not bearing the thought of taking my eyes off the ink for fear of missing something even for a moment
Congratulations on the Honourable Mention
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
Apologies on the late Hood-Wink!
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This is a well penned piece. However, the chosen background I found rather distracting and does absolutely no justice to your finely chosen words here.
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Hoodwink!!
This is so beautiful, the metaphor flowed so gracefully across the page, I loved this one. best to you in the contest
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Hoodwinked!
What a wonderful poem that at first I thought might be a Senryu as it has a 'Japanese' feel to it. Great imagery here & amazing metaphor. This is a breathtaking write. Short & compact with immense power & poignantly written. Bravo dear poetess. 
I really enjoyed this. 
All the best in the contest. 
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HOODWINKED!
The visuals and metaphors in this piece are a delight to read; excellent writing and an even better message, to return in kind beautiful gifts of the spirit within us.
Much love in Christ, BonnieQ
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this is nice. the words work well together
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what a wonderful poetic statement.
awannabepoet
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I breathed into the fridge to see my breath. It didn't do what you said, so you can't be talking about me.......so who? I wonder. Lovely simple words.
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beautiful
beautifully said.....
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