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Flushed

A mesmerizing betrayer

Not her lover was he
Deceiver of fragile emotions

Her face flushed with crimson distraught

The innocent soul realized his heart resides with another

 

How could he?

Author notes

Prompt: Crimson
30 words

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  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 10
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    i really like your description "deceiver of fragile emotions" - so telling.


  • blueyez
    September 9
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    I love the way you penned this.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    September 9

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    Beautiful lines in this write!
    All the best to you in this contest dear.
    It's great to read you once again!



    Jeremy0826


  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    September 9

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    Ooh. Lovely.

    Her face flushed with crimson distraught

    The innocent soul realized his heart resides with another

    Great poem, nice description.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    September 9
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    Good luck Marisa! lol

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