Bella is so beautiful
It was love at first sight
If only she would love me too
I'd sleep better at night
But she has to choose
The bloodsucker who wants to kill her
When she knows that he's so dangerous
How could all this love fill her?
I've tried my best and still he wins
What's so good that Edward's got?
What's so perfect that he marries her?
What does he have that I have not?
Overprotective and smells bad too
His skin's so cold like his heart
I must remind myself it would hurt Bella
To keep from tearing him apart
He better make her happy
And keep her safe and sound
I may be her sun as she says
But there's a time when the sun has to go down
Author notes
Thanks to Stephanie Meyer for her awesome characters!!! =]
And I chose the three way Jacob, Bella, Edward thing. Thanks!
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Nice. I like this very much. You will be in the finailists.
Thanks for the entry.
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Knocking off a syllable here and or a word there tightens diction and frequently adds to effect and poetic stress ...
perhaps for...
How could all this love fill her?
How could this love fulfill her?
perhaps for...
What does he have that I have not?
What has he I have not?
perhaps for...
But there's a time when the sun has to go down
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Grr. I'm getting tired of reading anything about Twilight. Sorry, but I'm now over it because it's a national phenomenon right now.
Good luck in the contest.
♥
Dax
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Wow
That is all I can say.I would like to ask you to put what I asked you to put in the author notes. Check the rules again.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
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ugh.... im sry but twilight?
more generic please?
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sorry no one asked you to read it.
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