surreal

Venus and Mars collided
days just don't feel the same anymore

I tried to escape ~~~
the rainbow didn't reach high enough

Grabbing Jupiter,
I slipped....

falling
falling
falling

[Hello....
Isn't anyone out there to save me?]

falling deeper into the unknown

Author notes

Pic Prompt - http://miss-deathwish.deviantart.com/art/sea-maiden-116531149

A contest entry

Quickie by perfectsunset. 625 points, ended September 9, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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PoetessA.L.OPrunty
September 10

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Worthy of Gold
Wonderful write. Very deep... Perhpas a follow-up is in the works?
- Kari
  September 10
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  Thank u so much First time I've done part two of something in awhile but here u go :
  http://allpoetry.com/poem/5700169
Salty Hibiscus
September 9

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congrats on the bronze cup - loved the message you send. well done.
Poetic Tasha
September 9

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wow kari this is really wonderful
gold worthy even. congrats on the shiney

loves it

TAsha
perfectsunset
September 9

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Such a deep and prospering write.
I love the visuals you sculpt with
your words so bold and beautiful.
I felt much mystery to this piece,
and it was quite intriguing.

Fabulous work here hun!

P.s... how did you manage to save the photo??
I really wanted it lol but it wouldn't let me
copy it

Best of luck & thanks for entering
- Kari
  September 9
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  eh I copied it and saved it lol. Have u cleared your cookies lately? You might need to.
Cerulean Sunrise
September 9
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Freaky good!