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Contradiction

The clearing visions
in my head
a process in restore
A desperate attempt
to create
leaves me famished
wanting more

The ink is dry
my quill is split
parchment left to drivel
Candle light is fading fast
my heart a beating echo
pulsating in my head

The words are like
a clockwork cycle
churning me with
violent empty dread...

My dreams become
a tense of past
teardrops stay in place
yearning to expel this yore
poetic reflections of
my mind are barred
leaving me insane

poetic genius of dark embrace
postpartum mind of matter
wavering on the brink
yet rising in disaster

I tell you this
I tell you now
with charcoal,
pavement,
and chatter...

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  • Melee Vau gold member
    October 11

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    another moving piece. love the verse:
    "The words are like
    a clockwork cycle
    churning me with
    violent empty dread..."


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    September 14

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    Awesome as always...

    Softly spoken narrative with a subtle rhyme scheme that flows gently throughout & makes for a compelling read...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • Garmond gold member
    September 11

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    I loved your subtle use of rhyme Darky.... you do it so well in this whispered way. It is like it is suggested more so than blatant and obvious and this lends you a freedom to break from it, without interupting the feel and rhythm. It inspires me to try something like this myself. Well done my friend.


  • ButILoveHer silver member
    September 9

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    Really brilliant my poetic friend
    U are the misstress of dark writes
    Keep up the eye popping work

    Cheers
    Vonnie


  • redmoonnrizing silver member
    September 8

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    I love your pieces! This is superb in both flow and form! A dark beauty indeed...Hope you will be around a lot more


  • awannabepoet
    September 8

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    And so it was seen to be said that all across the land a great quill was spilled and the writer of darkness was riding once again.

    Behold, she's coming back
    Behold, there is going to be an attack
    listen to the sound ... tat..tat..tat.. the machine gun sings
    and all around her
    lay dead and dying thoughts that once hid within her mind.

    Welcome back Darky....


  • Jayde1
    September 8

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    awwwwwwww

    hahahaha.........this is awesome...

    i like z madness that stems from the denial of ap pleasure,.......

    your muse is back...if only u had the time to embrace your GENIUS....

    DARKY...........ure back!!!!!!!!



    luv ya wife


    ure hubby


    Jayde


    xoxoxox

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