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The places she falls

there was something
in the way her wrists curved
hands angled down towards
her paper, as if
it was the only thing
left.

empty words
splattered in uneven lines across
torn sheets
were all
she had to believe in.

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  • sgking123 silver member
    September 20

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    wow

    profound and very well written..wonder what she was writing on thos epages which were torn later.. i can hazard good guess. the peom was so smooth and flowing that I swam with it nice and cool. have very simiplar sounding poems on my page...please visit may be you can see and derive more soul comfort.

  • Topnotchsy
    September 15

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    A little abstract here with not a whole lot for the reader to work with, but I really like what you did in the two stanzas you offer. The imagery is really strong. Nice write.