Remember now, the cooling drops;
Alas the rain- It hasn't stopped.
It falls, it falls, in sapphire splendor;
Nearly cleansing lowly thoughts.
In sapphire splendor;
Never stops.
So when it rains;
Embrace the fall,
Pierce the listless mind you've wrought;
'Till clarity sings it's lovely song;
Embrace them still, the rains of thought
Make them yours, or yours to gain
Be grateful for the sapphire rains;
Embrace the fall, these rains of thought;
Remember now, the cooling drops.
Author notes
This is an acrostic poem, and my first one too, so bare with me~
This is supposed to be in category three.
A contest entry
- September New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended October 5, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is brilliant! I love the use of the acrostic (which I always fail at lol) and the use of sapphire in description of the rain is perfectly done (and not one I see often!!)
Great use of words and the flow is perfect.
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I really like the disjointed rhyme of this piece, and the repetition is really well done - it makes me think of sleepy days where philosophy comes to the fore and people are sitting inside in the warmth
beautifully done!
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Thanks for entering the September New Member Contest.
My first read through your poem and I did not notice it was acrostic until I read your author notes. The flow and vividness of the poem just moved me through start to finish without really taking into account any particular form. It turning out to be acrostic just made it even more amazing.
Best of luck in the contest.
Violet
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:O!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It's pretty!!!!!!
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ahaha, thanks, you think so? ^ ^
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Yes, I think so!
Gorgeous? O.O
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welcome to allpoetry
I really enjoyed this acrostic, they can be hard to do sometimes. I do love the imagery that you used in this, the rain can be so many things,well done on this, and thanks for sharing, keep up the writing and good luck in the contest!
cheers
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That was awesome. Nice Job
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Welcome to Allpoetry
First of all, very clever with the acrostic. Your imagery is lovely, and the blue background fits nicely as well, though I wish you'd darkened it by a shade or two. The white font is rather hard to read against such a pale colour.
Other than that, well done & good luck.
Laura
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Welcome to AllPoetry
This is incredibly beautiful I found the use of an acrostic gorgeous and clever, allowing your ink to create vivid imagery that flows like rain for the reader
Lovely poem
Thank You for Your Entry & Best of Luck
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I love this! It's so pretty, rain is one of my favorite things to draw inspiration from, and though I love the rain, the inspiration drawn from rain is usually gloomy. I loved how it flowed and stuttered a bit, but rhythmically, and the repetition was just beautiful. My favorite part has to be that I didn't realize it was acrostic, that's like an added bonus instead of the main frame for the words, good job kiddo!
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Thanks Billy~ =]
I wasn't thinking this was my favorite of my poems, I thought it was kinda bad -because- of the stuttering, but I'm really glad you liked it ^ ^
And the acrostic- I've just been dying to try that out x]
Thanks for the comment!
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