there is a sort of...thing
that will intonate you
with every single thing around you
sort of like ...being liquid and solid
at the same time.
Author notes
i got the title and inspiration from this song. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AouNgDIluns&feature=related
A contest entry
- Teach me Abstract poetry by rinzurajan.
400 points, ended November 15, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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good luck
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the title was nice but somewhere down the line it left me wanting for more...
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this is a good basic outline for your poem.....
learn to stretch with imagery and illusion....
using words...that stretch your nouns and verbs...
with adjectives lightly touched.....
example;
is it illusion that resonates within...
that will intonate;
peel the layers from your skin
piercing you deeper to expose;
the liquid mass battling your solid soul.
now...that's just mine....
off the top of my head....I just wanted to show you
how to stretch it....
be fearless, be bold,
be un-inhibited....
and by the WAY...
DAMN...THAT SONG WAS FABULOUS!
LOVED IT!
WAY TO WRITE AND LET IT INSPIRE YOU!
ears/Seattle
GLUTTON FOR PUNISHMENT SALUTE!
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Very interesting. The title was stunning, too. Best of luck in the contest.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Well I must say... I can't wrap my head around this peice. I'll have to come around later and see if my mind is open then. Glad to see a new work up at least. It's been much too long!
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I liked this, it got something there in its depths, something like confusion.
'being liquid and solid
at the same time.'
This was nicely written, that's my favorite part. It feels like someone standing by a crossroad not knowing which way to go. Well penned.
Love
~Noor
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