Your leaving penetrates me deep within my Soul.
Making me mourn the beginning of countless nights
spent all alone.
This distance you have placed between us is cold
cutting me in two leaving me empty inside.
Who is to blame?
Close your eyes
it won't make me go away.
I'll wait, so quiet
until you remember you left me with scars.
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- PIF Semi Quickie!! by Sweet Impatience.
1200 points, ended September 12, 12 entries
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Comments
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the first stanza is so sad hun - so lonely and then the second one gives it an extra cold slice wit cutting you into two.. wow I do love your imagery in this
Love the ending there!!! awesome strong ending!! x DD
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Some sad sentiments here, but still well penned.
Congrats on the shiny.
Ken
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this is a very emotional and sad poem that you've penned. it vibrates within the wall of one's heart. the heartache and pain that accompany it is strong. the imagery through these lines have a lasting effect on the reader.
Excellent job and take on the prompt
Good luck
Kat
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very deep, i love the first stanza and the last paragragh. stunning, ive had a personal exp abit the same. i love it.
WELL DONE!
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Very powerfully penned, I do like the ending! The emotions here are cold and full of the desire for comeuppance. Revenge can be so sweet, and boy makes a good write
First line tho you have a typo, within 
A much enjoyed poem!
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One of my first reads of yours...A stunning write of love gone wrong, and right to the end you capture our attention...All the best in the contest!
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