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I Wonder.

I wonder.

Would it make you happy to know that somewhere
across the city
across the state
across the country
across the world
perhaps even across the cosmos,

a girl's heart is beating faster at the thought
of the possibility
of the potential
of information
about
you?


What if you knew the girl?
or at least, used to.

And what if
that girl
was

me?


I only wish that someday
I could feel this way
about somebody
real.


But for now I don't mind.


Do you?

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  • Heroesrox
    September 7

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    I like how you ended this with a question! Very nifty, indeed. This was very good and I have no critical things to say about it. My fave part was this.

    "I only wish that someday
    I could feel this way
    about somebody
    real."