My viscera seemed to run upwards in this place...
Corrosion this places scent...
My blood running from me...
Leaves me realizing...
I'm nailed to the ceiling...
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A contest entry
- Take Me To The Dark Side by Diminished Capacity.
950 points, ended September 11, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Frozen in complete fear and breathless
Nice sense of suspense
I love the intense feeling of looming descent as it makes me realize a deep thought of Interesting play on mixed words, the way the title and the poem itself work and form together. It is something that most of us struggle to truly fit together. A nice piece of excrutiated pained expression. Good luck in the contest ahead.
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nailed to the ceiling!! ohhh such a different ending to what I expected! Nailed to the ceiling like your trapped there forever! Love it, love the imagery
xx welldone on the HM
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This was very awesome =D
Usually I'm not a fan of short poems but the simple idea and how you portrayed was awesome. The clarity is also quiet sharp which is another awesome feature. The flow is also great =D -
wow thats good. a very clearly painted image created by this poem. and omehow, it seems to flow very nicely
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Interesting play on words, the way the title and the poem itself work together. It is something that most of us struggle to fit together. A nice piece of pained expression. Good luck in the contest.
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ouch... although if i think through the pain of it all... it would be amazing to see things from that view. nicely done
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this was something to feast your eyes one
while looking up laying on the floor
hugs always Angel♥
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Hm i have such a strong image in my mind of this person. i like it,
Nice job.
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Oh that is sick. I can picture it too...so nice.
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