Who stands on chance advance is swiftly lost,
gist takes in haste, to waste wakes, misdirection
where errors' terrors tremble counting cost;
yet yin yang spins win/win from circuit section.
To take up arms against a sea of struggles
sounds fair enough, of such stuff dreams are made,
but cause/effect consideration juggles
may role-reverse fame’s game however played.
True speculation, [s]ta[l]king stock in hand,
despite clock's second thoughts, can offer cue
to tune up creativity, expand
from late wait's weight to wings which span worlds new.
Where turmoil steam's stream channelled on the boil,
there poet shuffles off [c]old mortal coil.
Author notes
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wor[l]ds in [b]rackets convey two or more meanings
[s]ta[l]king = stalking talking staking taking ... forsaking aching
[c]old cold and or old
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I'm looking at Sonnets to learn
I passed this up last night with a cursory viewing of the complete sonnet, but today the highlighted last two lines caught my eye and I read it more appreciatively this morning. I think I get the gist of it! Even though the first two lines could also apply to my viewing of your poem last night, to me, the sonnet relates to the process of writing a poem, from first inspiration, struggling through the process, which can go around and around until finally the poem comes alive.
So, I like how the last couplet does the summing up and I can see all the different poetic devices, the (watery) metaphors, "to waste wakes", "sea of struggles", "turmoil steam's stream", the internal rhyme, the consonant rhyme, and the (12th line) alliteration. And the end rhyme is not forced, so I think this is an amazing sonnet.
Myself, being new to poetry, wanting to write a sonnet, and being stuck at first inspiration, I will bookmark this for encouragement.
I find your use of brackets for conveying two or more meanings pretty cool and wonder two things: Is this unique to your poems and do you have favorite meanings if/when you give a reading to an audience?
Thanks for sharing your poem.
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