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Behind Withered Suns

Dew drops scatter
moonlit window panes,

streetlight reflections
and mirrored lightning
bask around roaring thunder,

moaning storm
drawing near,

sighing winds
dress clouds in black
to hide fallen diamonds

behind withered suns.

born with no direction, I'll just keep on spinning

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  • atticus snow
    September 12
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    Delicious imagery Kerri.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    September 12

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    Superb

    I loved the imagery in this write. You have expressed your thoughts quite well, indeed. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.


  • darkmermaid
    September 12

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    Interestin. I must say i am speechless. Love the length of the poem. Quite short but it says alot. I especially like the title of the poem. Great work!


  • smitaanand
    September 12

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    You have the magic of metaphor in your verse a vivdly pictersque write very beautiful. Thanks for this treat to the senses...


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 12

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    Beautiful descriptions, those storms can be quite soothing. Very well written piece.

    ♥
    whisper


  • whiterabbit.
    September 8

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    The imagery here is so vivid and breathtaking. I love the way you've described everything. I can picture this whole scene in my mind.

    "sighing winds
    dress clouds in black
    to hide fallen diamonds

    behind withered suns."

    ^^^^^^I love that ending. It's gorgeous.


  • blueyez
    September 7

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    I love the line... to hide fallen diamonds... you are always so eloquent in your wording ame This was a wonderful read to start my night


  • Denerica silver member
    September 7

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    This is beautiful I love the last lines especially, dress clouds in black, to hide fallen diamonds, sighing winds. Excellent. Blessings.

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