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[a gloomy sunset]





a gloomy sunset
boats secure to the pier
wrestling with emptiness

a silent couple
the mutter of waves sinking
into their hollow footsteps




Author notes

sedoka (5 -7 -7, 5 -7 -7 syllables)
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/sedoka.html


Prompted => "empty boat"

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  • bachelorette silver member
    September 10

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    "wrestling with emptiness" is a magnificent line! This feels so lonely and foreboding, as if a storm is threatening on the horizon. Threatening both the couple and the boats. Wonderful job with showing this scene from two different perspectives. It's dramatically penned and takes my mind in all directions. Well done. Thank you for entering!
    -K