There was this guy who had none but a mother and a desire
All his life he just wanted to keep his mother and find a fix for his fire
Desire opened her mouth one day and said "you can have me"
The guy was was overjoyed, overwhelmed, overly happy
He didn't listen to all of the desire's words
He would know that her demands are murderous
She said I have but one demand you have to fulfill
She said fulfill this not and I will not come but stand still
She wanted his mother's heart
She wanted him to carve it out
In his world two times two equaled five
Oceans were put out by fire
His right and left are at war now
He keeps asking himself "how how how"
Then suddenly mama came along to him
A knife she held to her breast and said carve it out, it was for him
He didn't know how she knew, he couldn't and didn't ask
He did as he was told by both women while wearing a mask
He had a sad smile on instead of tears of joy
Was this world turning him into a toy?
Her last words were "I Love You Son"
He screamed "GOD"
Walking on the street both hands bloody towards Desire
In one had his mama's heart in the other grief burning with fire
Desire saw him coming with her demand
She was happy and she got up to stand
As he was walking to her he tripped and fell on one knee
mama's heart screamed "my poor son got a bleeding knee"
He stood up in front of smiling Desire
He was burning in his hatred fire
As Desire opened her hand to receive the heart
He stabbed Desire through her heart and turned to depart
He stood on the edge of a cliff overlooking the ocean
"mama I'm bringing it back to you, forgive me, your Son"
He said them and leaned forward
Wishing that just once clocks would tick backward
Author notes
Please do watch the video. I decided to treat my readers and add the song that inspired and helped me to write this poem. Let the music and video take you away along with the poem lets see where you'll get. I need feedback on this. If you guys like this concept I can add my other poems like this as well so that every experience is mind blowing and unique. I want to leave an aftertaste in your hearts.
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- make me cry, make me feel alive. by savemysoul.
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I'm techno-impaired, so I haen't seen the video yet, but this is so stunningly right on...as a Mamma I've got to say yours did an outstanding job, you are amazingly insightful and eloquent in your works. I'm having to limit myself to one a day, to savor them.
Love the piece, and I'll figure out what to do with the video, sooner or later. lol
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its your greatness, and grace of god that makes people see my poems as they truly are. its not me its your kind heart.
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such a good poem for all moms. good write and thanks for entering.
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Va,va,va,,, this is sooo awesom gud luck !
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I loved this. Yes, we mothers will do anything and give everything for and to our children.
To have our children realize and acknowledge this is the greatest blessing and love any mother can have or feel. You've put all of this in this poem. I enjoyed this read. -
Very intriguing, and other-worldly. I enjoyed it a lot.
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here you go
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I wanted to thank you for welcoming me. I thought this was a very bold write. Your rhyming was very well done as well. A dark and bittersweet piece. Thank you for sharing.
n.e.o.n
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Ummm. That was scary. That last line broke my heart because I know that wish. I know it very well and it beats with my heart. The whole poem was captivating, even though it was creepy.
Beautifully written.
Write on.
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It's fantastic!
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very spooky.
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Aftertaste in my heart for sure, this is bizare! Yet familiar! It says a lot and really makes me think, how many instances in life make us stab one to please another, and vice versa. Thanks for sharing!
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great poem. the video in enabled...... plz send me the link for it!
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Very unique in that you put the video with the poem. The poem itself was very strange but also very creative. Thoughtprovoking. Good job!
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the song made my heart weep...tears of sadness and JOy!
desire for me....was my daughters addiction to heroin
in which she choose to walk away from her family
and leave us to bleed and weep...upon the altars of utmost
pain and vast grief.....
it was a great battle for me to uplift my daughter
into the arms of heaven....and fight for her life
with her cursing at me...she just wanting death and the
peace she could not find in our arms....
but Hallelujah....the pain and pressure
became too much..and she
finally asked for help....to end the misery
of addiction.
and if she is to hate me for the courage
and tears....I had to walk thru for her
then I will die a gratefu; and blessed mother
knowing...heaven did not abandon me...
and gave me courage I knew not I had!
ears/Seattle
beautiful song...thankyou!
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This was a thought provoking and powerful piece. Great write!
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Wow
Very strange write. A lot of emotions flow from the words. The video was great. The rhyme was great. Another great write my young friend
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You were right with this one, desire is too often fatal. I loved the words you chose and rhythm and rhyme are amazing.
Well done!
Nela
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wow this powerful strange but powerful
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WOW
This brought tears to my eyes. There's no equal for a mother's love for her kids.
while reading this, my mind kept going through different ends to this poem. I was surprised with yours. Great Job
Also, you're making my favorite music into poetry. Thank you for that.
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And with his ending came the true meaning of love, for a mother would give her eyes, her mind, her body, her soul and yes even tear out her beating heart for the love of a son.
And so it was that he came to understand that which it means to truly love the color of your own blood.
I like it, I like it so!
AJ, this was an awesome piece of poetry man!
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