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Never Far

How it came about I guess it all depends
we started out as merely friends.
That was almost five years ago
when friendship found a place to grow.
But when it all began
did we realize destiny had a bigger plan?
From the very start so many feelings were there
and slowly of them we both grew increasingly aware.
From that so it all became
and we started out to play loves game. 
Emotions got too strong
I tried to to walk away,
before something could go really wrong
but you said in your life I needed to stay.
I don't know what it was I thought
but how far away from you would I have got?
So it was only friends we were
as under the surface love continued to stir.
Then one night a kiss that stood everything on end
and no longer could either of us pretend.
That beautiful soft sweet touch
for you it was just too much.
This time you tried to walk away but your heart could not forget
so I ask how far away from me did you really get?
As it goes friends we were again
with only a beautiful memory of that night when.
Half a year had come and passed
fate and destiny came together to conspire
and then our true love had finally come at last
forever to be the other's desire.
As love and passion raged
inside each of us the others heart was caged.
Together almost two years
and then came that painful flow of tears.
You had no choice but to leave me
and this perfect love we both know was meant to be.
Where once love had flourished and grown
now two hearts were abandoned and alone.
Then I had to wonder if true love was really dead
when on both parts many hurtful things were said.
Your heart was left distraught and sad
mine left unforgiving and mad.
They say in time all wounds heal
so as friends with it we begin to deal.
Now almost a year later you say my love you still miss
and I guess that night I just had to know
if it was that love between us still continued to grow
as all at once I had to have that kiss, your kiss.
And so it seems,
For my love your heart still dreams
and for yours mine screams.
With a touch of fate and destiny's star
away from each others heart neither one of us is going to get very far.

Author notes

This was penned for my friend, my lover, my muse, my memory and my once in a lifetime.


Written April 3rd, 2004

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  • Forgottn18Beauty
    May 17, 2005
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    Wow so confusing, going from friends to love and back again. Sounds absoluetly crazy. I think I'd beat up the guy I love if that ever happened so many times. I really liked this poem, it had a lot of readable emotion. It had a good flow. Thanks for entering.
    -Jess


  • lazybeanbag
    May 13, 2005
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    Great poem. I could feel the emotions and the words flowed together beautifully. Thanx for entering my contest.
    Bethany


  • Mad Moon silver member
    April 26, 2005
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    WOW! This is so heartfelt, and stuffed full of emotions. It really tugged at my heart! I think so many of us can relate to this, making this a heartbreaker! Well done. Beautifully written!


  • -Proudmom-
    April 25, 2005
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    wow...this is so great! sweet and heartfelt...it makes me feel happy...and miss my baby...


  • SilentWhispers9
    April 25, 2005
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    this was an excellent write. it was full of true emotion. sorry if this really happened to you.thank you for entering this woderful write in my contest. good luck!


  • Lost In My Thoughts
    April 17, 2005
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    Great Piece

    This is so sweet and so sad! I loved this piece so much. Did this actually happen? oh this is such a great piece! Keep up the great work, thank you for entering my contest and Good luck!

    Tiffany


  • Ce11arDoor
    April 2, 2005
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    Wow if this poem is "based of true events" you must have had one emotional roller-coster ride. But hey, you should be so lucky to have had experinced it, right? I hope for the best for you in your endevors. that is if its all true. if not, well then you should be a novelist or something... right for the enquirer because I really enjoyed your poem. good luck in the contest!!

  • angelic1
    March 22, 2005
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    Oh, this is so sweet! It's beautiful! There's so much emotion in this piece. It's a little mixture of joy and sorrow, and that's what makes the best poems, I think. This is somethingI can relate to a little. I wish you luck in my contest!

    ~Niki~


  • Haze
    January 31, 2005
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    Awsome poem, I have gone through this with this guy I have known since the 1st grade, we have been dating off and on since then, but now he has a new girlfriend, and I am engaged, but I think that no matter what we will always love eachother, but now as really good friends, sometimes I get a little jelouse, but I quickly get over it, well anyway, Good luck in the contest!


  • natari gold member
    January 31, 2005
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    Well Written

    A lovely piece.The story unfolded and makes the reader wonder the outcome..Thank you for entering and good luck..Helen..

  • RoseThatBled
    January 29, 2005
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    Wow. *tears welling up* that was so sad and true to life! You use some nice images and the descriptions were fenomenal. You should be so prod of it. The rhyming's a little rough but it adds to the effect of confusion. Good luck in the contest

    ~Rosie xxx~


  • January 11, 2005
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    This was really good and the smilies made it even better lol...I've never really fallen for a best friend so i can't really relate on that level but i can deffinately relate in other aspects. Thank you for entering my contest and goodluck!

    -candice


  • Niki1227
    December 16, 2004
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    WONDERFULL this poem Is so what i have been thru with My G/f Great job you really caught my heart in this one

  • adidas
    December 2, 2004
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    OMG, this was sooo good. I can really relate and actually it is going on in my life right now. I loved it and i think you did a great job! keep up the good writes!


  • ravenofdarkness
    October 27, 2004
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    awww sweet
    *rav*

  • DevinRiane
    October 24, 2004
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    WOW! Hey i absoultly loved your poem! great flow some rhyming seemed a lil forced but otherwise it was great good luck


  • BehindTheEyes
    October 3, 2004
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    This is really REALLY good. I like the smilies in it lol it's long but really awesome. Good luck in my contest and thanks for entering.

  • passionatepoet
    October 2, 2004
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    THIS IS A GOOD ONE. VERY LONG LOL BUT GOOD. THANKS FOR ENTERING AND GOOD LUCK.


  • MyMudPies
    April 5, 2004
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    I like this one alot. It was so filled with emotion and I am forever grateful that you shared such love with me. Thank you for entering and good luck!
    Stephanie


  • DrkPoet silver member
    April 3, 2004
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    Lol, thank you Gregg. I think I'm going to nick name you "The Lord of Poetry." Either that or Captain, My Captain. Lol.


  • lordoftherings gold member
    April 3, 2004
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    Thank you, I try to remain professional in my critiquing and am content that some are satisfied with my suggestions, well the others I think are still a little immature to understand what it means to write poetry hehehhe just joking lol

    Forgot to critique this one...oops! Though I like the poem as a whole, some lines are longer than others and wondering if you could dissect them and separate them into other lines so that the flow is like an ebb tide instead of a rush of waves and then back...I know sometimes it is difficult but do you know what enjambment is in poetry?

    Edited on Apr 04 because ''.

  • Maryangel
    April 3, 2004
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    GREAT WORK!

    WOA ! WHAT A COOL , SO SPONTANEOUS , SWEET , CRAZY ,ROMANTIC POEM ! AWWW ! YOU REALLY MADE ME THINK , IF THAT HOW MY ROMANTIC POEMS LOOK LIKE , REALLY EXCELLENT WORK 1 KEEP UP ~! MARY


  • antichrist
    April 3, 2004
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    geez... I thought I wads the hopless romantic, sorry but you top me! uhh, great job keep it up!!!


  • eyes sewn open
    April 3, 2004
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    hehe, no prob

    -bre loves you


  • DrkPoet silver member
    April 3, 2004
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    Thanks for picking up that type-o will get that fixed, and thanks for reading.

  • eyes sewn open
    April 3, 2004
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    Wow... this is a really powerfuly emotional poem... I LOVE IT ^-^ - but you deviate from the rhythm and ryming structure which is a bit distracting

    oh, and i think you ment 'then' instead of 'the' in:
    "The I had to wonder if true love was really dead"

    great write, keep penning

    -bre loves you


  • mendee86
    April 3, 2004
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    I loved the way you added the emoticons! Honestly, it made it a lot more interesting to read! I love poems that are just a complete outpouring of emotions like this one - I've written a lot of those lately. Where it seems your pen just started moving and didn't quit until the end. You did a beautiful job with this piece and i wish you the BEST of luck in this contest!@


  • Shadow Kitsune
    April 3, 2004
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    Wow. This is a beautiful poem. Wanderful, Amazing, BRAVO! I liked reading it. it touched my heart, really. Thanks for sharing with AP.


  • April 3, 2004
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    That was said......But man that was really good. some forced rhyming, but it wasnt bad. it was great, you made the rhyming great. it flowed perfectly. that is quite a tough thing to deal with but im sure you will be fine. good luck with all thats going on in your life and thank you for sharing this great poem with all of us. keep up that good work, i love it, ......-Tommy


  • Confessions
    April 3, 2004
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    aww that was extra sweet! great writing and i loved the story, you showed it with great vocabulary and awesome context! very good job! and it had my attention from the beginning! so thats always good. keep up your good work!
    -Amanda


  • into your eyes
    April 3, 2004
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    not to be a follower but awwww! such a great poem!


  • -13right-Eyes-
    April 3, 2004
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    Awhh...Wow...this is really sad, but very sweet.
    I really love it and you did such an excellent
    job with it. The rhyme is flawless and the story
    behind it is so amazing...I really love it...wow.
    Awesome write!!

    Much love,
    Heather


  • Onyx Dragon
    April 3, 2004
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    AWWWW This was so sweet and full of love! my absolute favorite part had to be

    and then our true love had finally come at last
    forever to be the others desire.
    As love and passion raged
    inside each of us the others heart was caged.
    Together almost two years

    Great write and the best of luck in the contest.

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